Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The graph illustrates the ratio of the people having complete driving license in great britain by the classification of the age and sex.
Overall' The percentage of complete driving licence is shown in this paragraph. The boys born in 2006 holds licence thier percentage is 39 percent.And the womens whose age is between 17_20 has the percentage of the 36 percent who have licence.And the most elder people who holds the licence has the age of the 70. Ther percentage in mens is 79 percent and in the womens is 25 percent.
The percentage of complete driving licence is shown in this paragraph. The boys born in 2006 holds licence thier percentage is 39 percent.And the womens whose age is between 17_20 has the percentage of the 36 percent .The people who born in 1975/1976 mens have the percentage of 48 percent and womens have the 20 percent .Mens of 2006 withe age of the 21_29 has 85 percent and the 1975/1976 has the 89 percent.women in 2006 have the 40 percent and 1975 to 1976 has the 61 percent the mens of 2006 with age of 30_39 has the 82 percent and also the 1975 to 1976 has the almost same percentage.Mens who have the age of the 40 to 49 born in the 2006 has the 81 percent and the womens have the 80 percentage and the men of the 1975 to 1976 has the 80 percentage and the womens have the 39 percent.
.And the most elder people who holds the licence has the age of the 70. Ther percentage in mens is 79 percent and in the womens is 25 percent.The people who have the age of the 50_59 in 2006 the have the 82 percent and the womens have 79 percentage.The people who have the age of the 60_69 born in 2007 has 82 percent and the womens have 62 percent.The people who have born in the 1975 to 1976 mens have 59 percent and the womens have the 18 percent.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to accurately interpret the data provided. The student confuses the age groups with birth years (e.g., 'boys born in 2006'), which is a fundamental misreading of the graph's axes. Furthermore, the report is highly repetitive, listing data points without synthesizing them into meaningful trends or comparisons. The overview is ineffective, as it merely restates the prompt rather than highlighting the main features of the data. Because the information presented is factually incorrect based on the provided graph and lacks a clear summary of trends, it does not meet the requirements for a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks logical progression. The information is presented as a disjointed list of statistics rather than a coherent report. Paragraphing is used, but the content within the paragraphs is repetitive and lacks clear topic sentences. Cohesive devices are used in a very mechanical and often incorrect way (e.g., 'And the most elder people...'). There is significant repetition of phrases like 'The percentage of complete driving licence is shown in this paragraph', which disrupts the flow of the text and makes the writing difficult to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic phrasing such as 'the percentage of' and 'the people who have'. There is a lack of variety in reporting verbs or comparative language. Errors in word choice are frequent, such as using 'boys' and 'womens' inconsistently and misinterpreting the labels on the graph. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision, and the persistent errors in terminology hinder the clarity of the report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the boys... holds licence'), incorrect pluralization (e.g., 'the womens'), and awkward sentence structures. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing spaces after periods and inconsistent capitalization. The student struggles to form complex sentences, and the simple sentences used are often marred by errors in basic grammar. These frequent errors make the text difficult to read and understand.
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