Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.0)

THE GRAPH SHOWS THE COMPARES OF THE MEN AND WOMEN COMPARISION BETWEEN FULL CAR DRVING LICENSE HOLDERS BY SEX AND AGE SIMALARITY IN 12 TO 70 AGE IN GREAT BRITIAN ANALYSIS DRIVING LICENCE.

IT IS CLEAR PROPOSITION MEN ONLY LEADING IN THIS GRAPH 17-20 AGE GAP MEMBERS LOWEST BOTH IS IN MEN IS LEADING IN 1975/76 IS 35 MEMBERS AND 2006 IS 38 MEMBERS MOREOVER WOMEN IS IN 1975/76 IS 20 MEMBERS AND 2006 IS 30 MEMBERS FURTHERMORE HIGHEST SECTOR IS 30-39 IS MEN IN 1975/79 84 MEMBERS AND INSIDE 2006 IS 85 MEMBERS HAVE DRIVING LICENCE IN MEN AND WOEN IS IN SAME AGE IN 30-39 IS 1975 45 HAVE AND IN 20

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Furthermore, the content is poorly developed. While you attempt to identify some trends, the data is presented in a fragmented and confusing manner. You have not provided a clear overview of the main trends, and the comparisons between men and women are difficult to follow due to the lack of clarity in your descriptions. To improve, you must ensure you cover all parts of the prompt, provide a clear summary of the main features, and ensure your response is of sufficient length to allow for a full development of your ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical organization and progression. There is no clear paragraph structure, and the sentences are disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow your argument. You rely on basic connectors like 'moreover' and 'furthermore', but they are used in a way that does not effectively link ideas. The lack of proper punctuation and the run-on nature of the sentences further hinder coherence. To improve, you should organize your writing into clear paragraphs—typically an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs—and use cohesive devices more naturally to connect your ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

Your vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. You frequently use the word 'members' incorrectly to refer to percentages or data points, which causes confusion. There is a lack of variety in your word choice, and you struggle to use appropriate terminology for describing trends (e.g., 'leading' is used repeatedly). Many of your phrases are non-standard, such as '17-20 age gap members'. To improve, you should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary for describing graphs, such as 'proportion', 'percentage', 'fluctuate', 'peak', and 'decline', and ensure you use these words in the correct context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There is a lack of sentence structure, with many fragments and run-on sentences. You struggle with basic subject-verb agreement and preposition usage (e.g., 'men only leading in this graph'). Punctuation is largely absent, which makes the text difficult to parse. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures. To improve, focus on writing complete, grammatically correct sentences with a subject and a verb. Practice using a mix of simple and complex sentences, and pay close attention to basic punctuation rules like using periods to end sentences.

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