Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Today Great Britain has percentage of driving licences holder 2006 is more then the past 1997 the men and women both have a hold large driving licence percentage you get driving licences at lest age is 17 there many men and women who got the driving at age of 17

If we see the information which i see its shoe that

throw the 1997 to 2006 the driving are more famous in Great Britain there are more driving licences holder in 2006 at the rate of 1997

there are more driving licences holder are mans

First we talk about men ratio if we see the ratio both their is not as a big gap in 1997 17-20 age men get 36% and in 2006 in this age 39% in past at 21-29 is higher 59% percent but know 2006 in become 67%

30-39 ratio in past is 81% but 2006 83% 40-49 ratio is 81% in past now 85%

On the other hand women at age of 17-20 in past ratio is 19% but

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to provide a clear overview of the main trends. While it attempts to select some data points, the information is presented in a fragmented and confusing manner. The comparison between 1997 and 2006 is inconsistent, and the description of the data is often inaccurate or incomplete (e.g., the response cuts off mid-sentence). The lack of a coherent summary of the main features—such as the general increase in licence holders across most age groups—means the task is only partially addressed. To improve, you must identify the most significant trends and present them clearly rather than listing isolated figures.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. The paragraphs are poorly defined, and the progression of ideas is disjointed. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas, making the text difficult to follow. For example, the transition between the general introduction and the specific age groups is abrupt and confusing. The use of referencing is also unclear, as it is often difficult to determine which data point the writer is referring to. To improve, you should use clear paragraphing and linking words like 'furthermore', 'in contrast', or 'consequently' to guide the reader through your analysis.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms like 'ratio', 'past', and 'get'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'driving are more famous' instead of 'driving became more popular' and 'mans' instead of 'men'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'significant increase', 'fluctuation', and 'age bracket', and ensure that words are used in their correct grammatical form.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and tense usage (e.g., 'its shoe that throw the 1997 to 2006'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with many run-on sentences and missing commas. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and using correct tenses when describing past data. Proofreading for basic errors like 'mans' vs 'men' is also essential.

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