Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Driving licenece is somthing important for most of people nowdays, age and sex does not matter because in modern life all of us need to move between places fastly, this diagram show us the percentage of people holding full driving licences in great britain by age and sex.
Firstly, the age, we notice that young people have the lowest percentage between all catigories, one major justification is that young people does not need to move a lot, after them we see that at the 20th the percentage grow, and thats beacause of so much people start working on this age so they need vechiels to with, at the 30th and 40th the statistics show that holders of licence are more on this than any other age, we can argue that at this age people are more stablish than younger age, older people have lowest percentage, this view is based on the idea that older people modt of them are retired so moving fast is not on them nessissary.
Secondly,when we talk about age, we see that men have the licence more then women at any age,that is because men need to move more than women.
Finally,the driving licence have lot of benifits, but it is not nessissary for all people.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to summarise the data but fails to provide a clear overview or accurately report the main features. The analysis is heavily reliant on personal speculation (e.g., 'young people does not need to move a lot') rather than objective data description. Furthermore, the response incorrectly identifies the age groups and fails to mention specific data points or trends shown in the graph. The inclusion of personal opinions about the benefits of driving licences is irrelevant to an Academic Task 1 report, which requires a neutral, analytical summary of the provided visual information. The response lacks the necessary focus on data comparison.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is illogical. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often misused, such as 'Firstly' and 'Secondly' to introduce points that do not follow a logical sequence. Referencing is frequently unclear, and the transition between sentences is often abrupt. The lack of a clear overview or summary at the beginning or end of the report further hinders the overall coherence. The paragraphing is present but does not effectively support the structure of a data report.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is limited and contains numerous spelling errors, such as 'licenece', 'somthing', 'nowdays', 'catigories', 'vechiels', 'stablish', 'modt', and 'nessissary'. These errors are frequent and occasionally impede the reader's understanding. The range of vocabulary is basic and repetitive, lacking the precision required to describe trends or statistical data (e.g., using 'grow' instead of 'increase' or 'rise'). There is no attempt to use less common lexical items or academic collocations appropriate for a formal report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of the writing. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'age and sex does not matter', 'young people does not need'), article usage, and sentence structure. The writing relies almost exclusively on simple sentences, with very few attempts at complex structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and missing spaces after commas. These errors are pervasive and significantly impact the readability of the text.
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