Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.5)

THE BAR CHART COMPARES THE DATA OF INDIVDUALS HOLDING FULL DRIVING LICENSE IN GREAT BRITAIN BY AGE AND SEX.

THE DATA STATES THAT PEOPLE OF 38% HOLDS LICENSE WHICH HAVE AGE 70 AND OVER AND THIS NUMBER ESCALATES TO 78% IN 2006.

ALSO WOMEN HOLDS LICENSE VERY LESS AS COMPARED TO MEN

THE CITIZENS OF THE AGE 60 TO 69 AND 50 TO 59 HAVE A SIMILAR RECORD OF 60% AND THIS RATIO JUMPS TO 85% IN 2006. INTERESTINGLY THE RATIO OF WOMEN SURGES TO 60% IN 2006.

IN 1975/76 WOMEN GAIN MORE NUMBER OF LICENSE THAN MEN AND THIS RECORD IS ALMOST SAME IN 2006.

THE MEN OF AGE 30 TO 39 GAIN LICENSE ALMOST SAME IN 1975 AND 2006 AND THIS RECORD IS ALMOST SAME WOMENS.

THE INDIVDUALS OF AGE 20 T0 29 GAINS MORE LICENSE IN 1975 AS COMPARED TO 2006 AND WOMEN HAS A SAME NUMBER.THE PEOPLE OF AGE 17 TO 20 HAVE SAME RATIO OF GETTING LICENSE IN 1975 AND 2006. THE FIGURES OF WOMEN ARE LOW IN 1975 AND ARE ALMOST 38% IN WOMEN.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to clearly identify the main trends or make meaningful comparisons. The information provided is often inaccurate or confusing, such as the claim that 'women gain more number of license than men' in 1975/76, which is not supported by the provided graph. The data points cited are frequently misread or presented in a way that obscures the actual trends. There is a lack of a clear overview, and the report does not effectively highlight the significant differences between age groups or the shift over time. The response struggles to present a clear summary of the key features.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed and confusing. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'also' and 'in 1975 and 2006'. The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow which age group or gender is being discussed. The lack of logical flow between sentences and the absence of a clear structure for comparing the data significantly hinder the overall coherence of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, relying on a limited set of words like 'license', 'record', and 'ratio'. There are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'holds license very less' instead of 'holds fewer licenses' or 'a lower percentage of licenses'. The spelling of 'INDIVDUALS' is incorrect. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with the necessary precision required for an Academic Task 1 response, often leading to ambiguity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'people... holds' and 'women has'. Sentence structures are simple and often lack proper punctuation or logical connection. The misuse of tenses and articles is pervasive throughout the text. While the writer attempts to use some complex structures, they are frequently faulty, leading to a lack of clarity in the information being presented. The control of grammar is weak, and errors are present in almost every sentence.

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