Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given chart below details the percentage of citizens in Great britain by their age and sex having a full driving licence
Overall, it is clearly shown that that the citzens in the early late 1900(1975/1976) acquired less driving lincense than the people in the early 2000's . In details , between the given sex below being men and women; men were the most to acquire their full drving lincense than women.
In the year [redacted phone] , the men exceeded the women in acquiring their license across that period from the ages of 17-20 to 30-39 at the percentage of below 40% , above 60% and above 80% respectively while the women followed shortly after at thr percentage of 20%, above 40% and over 40% respecitively . In addition, similarily to the other age groups , the male poplution surpassed the female poplution at acquiring their full lincese at 40-49, 50-59,60-69 and over70 age groups at the percentage of over 80% ,below 80 %, below 60% and nearly half of it (30%) respectively while the female followed shortly after at the percentage of nearly 40% , over20% , below 20% and nearly 5%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graphs, but the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear, cohesive overview. While you identified that men generally hold more licenses than women, the attempt to compare the two time periods (1975-1976 and 2006) is confusingly phrased as 'early late 1900'. The summary of data points is accurate, but the presentation of figures is cluttered, making it difficult for the reader to follow the trends. To improve, focus on grouping data more logically rather than listing every age bracket sequentially, and ensure the overview clearly highlights the most significant trends across both time periods.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between sentences is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'at the percentage of'. The transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when comparing the two time periods. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'conversely', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the logical progression of your ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. There are several spelling errors, such as 'lincense', 'drving', 'similarily', and 'poplution'. You rely heavily on basic phrasing like 'at the percentage of' and 'followed shortly after'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'a significant disparity', 'a downward trend', or 'remained consistent'. Additionally, ensure you proofread for basic spelling mistakes, as these errors occur frequently throughout the text and detract from the overall quality.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include incorrect article usage ('the men exceeded the women'), punctuation errors (spaces before commas), and awkward phrasing ('men were the most to acquire'). Subject-verb agreement and preposition usage also need attention (e.g., 'at acquiring' should be 'in acquiring'). While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and punctuation prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction before attempting more complex structures.
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