Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The provided bar graphs illustrate the percentage of individuals who have full driving licences in Great Britain by those aged and their gender.

Overall, in men groups who had more licences compare to women. The highest proportion of boys who had licence those aged 50 to 59 while the most least of group in men who had licence those aged 17 to 20. In contrast, the highest proportion who had vehicle licence those aged 30 to 39 however, the least girls who had licence age was 70 and more then.

IN 1975 to 2006, the people who aged of 50 to 59 in men gender was highest aged of group they have overall 80% licence.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the task. While the student attempts to identify some trends, the analysis is fragmented and lacks a clear overview of the data. Key comparisons between the two graphs are underdeveloped, and the information provided is often confusing or inaccurate (e.g., the mention of '1975 to 2006' is not supported by the provided task). The response lacks a coherent summary of the main features, leading to a partial and underdeveloped response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks logical progression. The sentences are disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is minimal and often misused, such as the awkward transition 'In contrast' which does not effectively link the ideas. Paragraphing is absent, making the text difficult to follow. The referencing is unclear, particularly when discussing the age groups and genders, which hinders the reader's ability to track the information provided. The overall structure is not sufficiently organized to support a clear argument or summary.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms like 'boys', 'girls', and 'people'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'most least of group' and 'men gender'. The student struggles to use precise terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion' or 'percentage', in a natural way. The lack of variety and the persistent errors in word formation and usage significantly restrict the ability to convey information clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence structures (e.g., 'in men groups who had more licences compare to women'). The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent. The high frequency of errors makes the text difficult to read and understand, indicating a lack of control over basic grammatical forms.

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