Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given bar chart elucidates information about Full car driving licence holders by sex and age . The chart compares different categroies and persent the data or number .

Overall , it can that there are noticeable information among different categroies shown in the chart . In addition , some categories show some fluctucation by followed increament as well as decreament wheares for some cases they remain stable .

According to the chart , the main first activities Great Britain percentages Men 1975/76 age 17-20 36% and 2006 38% , Age women 1975 20% 2006 30 % in driving licence . Age 21to 29 Men age 1975 78% and 2006 70 % , woment age 1975 45% 2006 65% in drving licence .

Age 30-39 women age 1975 50% 2006 78% , Men age 1975 82% 2006 85% in driving licence . Age 40-49 Men age 1975 82% 2006 90 % , women age 1975 38% 2006 78% in driving licence . Age 50-59 Men 1975 70% 2006 90% , women age 1975 25% 2006 75% in driving licence . Age 60-69 men 1975 58 % 2006 94% , women age 1975 15 % 2006 65 % in driving licence . Age 70 and over Men age 1975 35% 2006 75% , women age 1975% 7% 2006 30 % in driving licence and great Britain Percentages .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to address the prompt by summarising the main features of the data concerning full car driving licence holders in Great Britain by age and sex. However, the response falls short of fully selecting and reporting the key trends and comparisons effectively. Instead of synthesising the information (such as the overall higher participation of men historically and the narrowing gap in younger cohorts by 2006), the body of the text devolves into a dense, repetitive listing of raw percentages (e.g., 'Age 30-39 women age 1975 50% 2006 78%'). This mechanical recitation lacks proper overview and fails to adequately highlight the broader differences between genders and across the years. Consequently, this leads to a Band 5 rating for Task Achievement as the task is addressed only partially and ideas are underdeveloped.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

Regarding coherence and cohesion, the essay attempts to follow a standard structure with an introduction, an overall statement, and body paragraphs. However, the logical progression is severely hindered by the fragmented presentation of data in the body paragraphs. Spacing and punctuation issues are rampant throughout (e.g., spaces placed before commas and full stops). Furthermore, cohesive devices are absent or inappropriately used, making the text read like disjointed data points rather than a cohesive summary. While there is an introductory paragraph and an overview attempt, the lack of smooth transitions and confusing layout of numbers result in a Band 4.5, which rounds to 5.0 based on general arrangement and attempt at organisation.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The lexical resource displayed is limited and repetitive. The student uses basic vocabulary items repeatedly, such as 'driving licence', 'age', 'men', and 'women'. There are also numerous spelling and typographical errors, such as 'categroies' for categories, 'persent' for present, 'decreament' for decrement, 'wheares' for whereas, and 'increament' for increment. These errors and the restricted vocabulary range mean the response achieves a Band 4.0 for this criterion, as the lexical choices are basic and repetitive, causing strain for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting almost entirely of fragmented noun-and-percentage lists rather than complete, well-formed sentences in the body. The opening sentences attempt basic structures but contain noticeable errors, such as 'it can that there are noticeable information' (missing verbs and incorrect word forms) and 'some categories show some fluctucation by followed increament'. Punctuation errors are frequent, particularly with spacing around terminal punctuation and commas. The high frequency of grammatical errors and lack of complex sentence control firmly places this response at a Band 4.0.

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