Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graphs illustrate the proportion of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

overall, man had the highest percentage between the age of 50 and 59 above 80% and, lowest rate between 17 and 20 under 40% in 2006, while above 80% between 30 and 39 and,under 40% in 1977/76.Women had the highest percentage within the age of 40 and 49, 30 and 39 nearly to 80%in 2006 and 175/76 too,lowest rate over the age of 70 in both years.

According to man, they were similar rate between the age of 30-39 and 60-69 at nearly above 80% in both years. Between the age 17-20, they had identical proportion close to 40% in 2006 and 1775/76.At the age of above 70, they were nearly close to 80% in 2006 and under 40%in 1776.

Acording to

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to cover the main features of the chart, noting extremes such as peak licence-holding ages and lower rates for younger and older demographics. However, the task achievement is limited by several factors: first, the word count is 140 words, which falls below the mandatory 150-word minimum, resulting in a task-length penalty. Second, there are numerous data inaccuracies and confused dates, such as referencing '1977/76' and '1775/76', which makes the reporting unreliable. Furthermore, the overview is rather disjointed and lacks a clear summary of the overarching trends. To improve, ensure that all figures and dates are carefully checked against the visual data and that the response meets the minimum length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks clear logical organisation and paragraphing. The response begins with a brief introductory sentence and an attempted overview, but it quickly dissolves into fragmented sentences and incomplete paragraphs, trailing off completely at the end ('Acording to'). Cohesive devices are minimal and mechanical, and referencing between years and groups is frequently unclear or confusing. To achieve a higher band, the student must structure the response into clear paragraphs, including an introduction, an overview, and well-organised body paragraphs with appropriate cohesive links to guide the reader smoothly through the comparisons.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, heavily relying on words like 'percentage', 'rate', 'highest', and 'lowest'. There are also lexical and factual transcription errors regarding years (e.g., '1775/76', '1776') and terms ('man' instead of 'men'). The range of vocabulary is inadequate for a higher score, as it lacks precise descriptions of trends (such as 'peak', 'fluuctuate', or 'gradual increase'). To improve, the student should expand their range of vocabulary by incorporating synonyms and functional academic phrases for describing statistical data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple or poorly constructed compound structures. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'man had', 'they were similar rate'), punctuation mistakes, and awkward phrasing ('nearly to 80%in 2006 and 175/76 too'). Additionally, the incomplete sentence fragments at the end of the response show a lack of control over sentence structure. To reach a higher band, the student needs to demonstrate a greater variety of complex sentence forms and improve basic grammatical accuracy.

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