Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The diagram shows illustrates, in the men's, in the start age of 17 to 20 they was 40% and in 2006 they was almost same. from 21 to 29 they was almost 80% and in 2006 was almost 65%, from 30 to 39 they was founded same percentage above 80%, from 40 to 49 they was decreased above 80% and in 2006 they was increased about 85%, from 50 to 59 they was decreased and founded almost 75% and in 2006 was increased and founded above 85%, from 60 to 69 again decreased on 60 but in 2006 was on same position, from 70 or above they was took high jumped and founded near to 40% and in 2006 was founded near to 80%. In the women side, the same years and the same ages, from 1975 to 1976 and in 2006 was start from near to 20% and from 40% and ends with the maximum amount was 80% and the lowest amount from the women was approximately 5%. The relevant points the age and percentage was from the age 21 to 69 and just was in 2006.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to cover parts of the visual data regarding men and women in different age groups, but it fails to provide a clear overview or a structured summary of the main features and comparisons. Much of the data is reported in a repetitive, list-like manner (e.g., 'from 21 to 29 they was almost 80%... from 30 to 39 they was founded same percentage...'). Furthermore, several figures are inaccurate when compared to the source data, and the description of the women's data is vague and poorly integrated. The lack of a clear synthesis or logical grouping of trends keeps this performance at a lower band level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text lacks clear overall progression and logical organisation. Instead of cohesive paragraphs with distinct thematic focus, the response is written as a single, run-on block of text connected almost entirely by commas and the repetition of 'and'. Referencing is frequently unclear, with ambiguous pronouns such as 'they was' used repetitively for percentages, years, and demographic groups alike. There is a complete absence of appropriate paragraphing, which severely impedes the logical flow of information.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and heavily constrained by the student's attempt to describe numerical figures. Words and phrases such as 'founded', 'high jumped', and 'amount' are used incorrectly or inappropriately in this context. There is no evidence of less common lexical items, and frequent word-choice errors (such as 'in the men's, in the start age' and 'In the women side') strain the reader's understanding and restrict the response to a low band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 3.5

The grammatical structure of the response is extremely weak. Almost every sentence contains serious errors, predominantly characterised by run-on structures linked improperly with commas, missing subjects or verbs, and persistent tense or agreement errors (e.g., 'they was 40%', 'they was decreased', 'they was took high jumped'). Complex sentence structures are non-existent, and simple structures are executed with frequent, heavy errors that significantly impede communication.

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