Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This bar chart illustrates information of people holding full driving licences in UK between1975 to 2006.

Over all, their is a significant increase in the number of driving licences on both gender men and women in 2006. while the lower persntage clear in the year 1975.

To begin with, meals shows peek in persntage between age 50 to 69 with 83%. on the other side, the women show growth between 30 to 49 withe 80%. in the year 2006.

More over, the rate decline in 1975 and mens provide about 38 from 17 to 70 years. women demonstreat samiler approach by 10% in the age of 70 and 20% in the age of 17,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to summarise the data by identifying some general trends, such as the overall increase in full driving licences by 2006. However, the word count is only 114 words, failing to meet the minimum requirement of 150 words, which significantly restricts the development of the task. Furthermore, several figures are inaccurate or poorly expressed, such as 'meals shows peek in persntage between age 50 to 69 with 83%'. While the writer tries to make comparisons between men and women, the lack of detail, inaccurate data interpretation, and incomplete length prevent the response from achieving a higher band. To improve, the student must write at least 150 words and ensure data points from the chart are read and reported accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is divided into brief paragraphs, but the overall organisation lacks clear logical progression. Cohesive devices are attempted, such as 'Over all', 'To begin with', and 'More over', but spelling and usage errors (e.g., 'Over all', 'More over') weaken their effectiveness. Pronoun referencing and linking between sentences are frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. Paragraphing is also rudimentary. To improve, the student needs to use cohesive devices more accurately and ensure that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus supported by logical transitions.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The lexical range is extremely limited and heavily impacted by numerous spelling mistakes and word-choice errors, such as 'persntage' instead of percentage, 'meals' instead of males, 'peek' instead of peak, and 'demonstreat samiler approach'. These errors impede communication and demonstrate a lack of control over basic vocabulary related to data trends. The student attempts a few topic-related terms like 'driving licences' and 'percentage', but overall vocabulary is inadequate for a higher score. To improve, the student should focus on accurate spelling of common vocabulary and learn precise collocations for describing graphs.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There are frequent, basic errors in sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, such as 'their is a significant increase', 'people holding full driving licences in UK', and 'mens provide about 38'. Complex sentence structures are largely absent or heavily flawed, and punctuation is inconsistent. The high frequency of errors causes considerable strain for the reader. To improve, the student needs to practice basic sentence construction, ensure correct verb forms, and eliminate frequent spelling and grammatical slips.

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