Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The graph given show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in great britain by age and sex. here is some main points. Full driving license percentage among men of age 17-20 are increase by 5-6% by year 2006 as compare to year 1975-76 while in women are ratio increase almost 10% which is huge. Similarly, Percentage among men of age 20-29 unfortunatly decrease by 5-6% by year 2006 as compare to year 1975-76 while in women ratio increase almost 22% by year 2026 as compare to 1975/76. Moreover, Percentage among men of age 30-39 is almost same as 1975-76 or you can say a 2%increase in 20026. Women of same age group show surprising increase which is of almost 40% by year 2026 as compare to 1975/76. , Men of age 40-49, increase the ratio about 5% compare to year 1975-76 while in women of same age group ratio increase almost 40% by year 2026 as compare to 1975/76. Now for men of age 50-59 ratio increase by alomst 10% by year 2006.Women of same age group show surprising increase which is of almost 46% by year 2026 as compare to 1975/76. Men of age 60-69, show good increase of ratio about 25% compare to year 1975-76 while in women of same age group ratio increase almost 45% by year 2026 as compare to 1975/76. lastly ,men of age over 70 and 70 years , ratio increase by alomst 40% by year 2006.Women of same age group show increase which is of almost 35% in year 2006 as compare to 1975/76.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of the chart, comparing licence holders by age and sex for the years 1975/76 and 2006. However, there are significant issues with data accuracy and years cited (such as inventing the year 2026 multiple times). The response lacks an overview, which is a crucial requirement for Academic Task 1, and the mechanical, age-by-age listing format leads to a lack of overall synthesis. While some general trends are captured, the numerous errors in data reporting and the omission of a concluding overview limit the task response to a Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The response suffers from poor paragraphing, being presented as a single, dense block of text instead of organised paragraphs. Cohesive devices are minimal and repetitive (e.g., 'while in women', 'by year 2006 as compare to year 1975-76'). There is no clear logical progression or overview, and referencing is repetitive and mechanical. Although ideas follow the order of the chart from youngest to oldest age groups, the absence of proper paragraphing and paragraph-level cohesion restricts the coherence score to a Band 4.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive ('percentage', 'ratio', 'increase', 'decrease'). There are numerous spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'great britain' (uncapitalized), 'unfortunatly', and 'alomst'. The student attempts to describe percentages and proportions, but the limited range of vocabulary and frequent lexical errors impede fluency and variety. Advanced or less common vocabulary is absent, placing this criterion firmly at Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There are frequent missing articles, incorrect prepositions, and faulty verb forms (e.g., 'The graph given show', 'Full driving license percentage... are increase', 'Men of age 40-49, increase the ratio about 5%'). Punctuation is also problematic, including run-on sentences and stray commas. Complex structures are rare and almost always contain errors. This level of persistent grammatical inaccuracy corresponds to a Band 4.
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