Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given line graphs illustrates the value of persons keeping full driving passes in England by age and gender.
Overall, both graphs explain the age of people and the both gender male and female having driving passes in 20th and 21th century in England. In men side 20th century and 21 century in the age of uder twenty they having a less amount of driing licencess othe the other side women side older people having a less amount of licencess.
Firstly, (1975/76,2006) men in the age of 17 to 20 the driving licences range same almost 38% as people get older the licences ratio were increase. At the last, when the people age 70 and over the ratio were (37%,89%).
Secondly, (1975/76,2006) men in the age of 17 to 20 the driving licences range almost (20%,25%) as people get older the licences ratio were increase. At the last, when the people age 70 and over the ratio were (3%,25%).
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The student attempts to summarise the visual data by categorising information into men and women, but the response suffers from severe inaccuracies, poor data reporting, and a misunderstanding of the chart type (calling them line graphs instead of bar charts). The data provided in brackets is often confusing or incorrect, such as stating that men aged 17 to 20 had a licence range of '38%' and then introducing fragmented figures. Furthermore, the overview lacks clarity, merely stating superficial details about age and gender without highlighting the main trends like overall increases across decades. According to the descriptors, the response only partially addresses the task with under-developed and inaccurate ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, which provides a basic structural framework, but the logical progression is weak. The introduction is poorly connected to the body paragraphs, and the use of transitional markers like 'Firstly' and 'Secondly' introduces data sets in a repetitive and confusing manner. Cohesive devices are generally inadequate or incorrectly applied, resulting in choppy and disjointed sentences. Referencing is often unclear, particularly when using bracketed figures without contextual links to the subjects. Overall, the arrangement of information lacks clear overall progression, fitting the Band 4 descriptor.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent word-choice errors and awkward phrasing such as 'holding full driving passes', 'people keeping full driving passes', and 'driing licencess'. There are numerous spelling mistakes (e.g., 'uder', 'driing', 'licencess') that occasionally strain the reader. The student attempts to use some task-related terms like 'percentage' and 'ratio', but the limited and inaccurate range restricts the score. The lexical control reflects a basic repertoire where vocabulary errors are common and impede smooth reading.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple sentence structures that are frequently faulty. There are major issues with subject-verb agreement and tense consistency, such as 'the driving licences range same almost 38%' and 'as people get older the licences ratio were increase'. Complex sentence attempts are virtually absent or grammatically incorrect. Frequent errors in punctuation and sentence boundaries are present throughout the text, causing significant difficulty for the reader and aligning with the Band 4 descriptor.
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