Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph shows the percentage of people that holding full driving licences in great britian by their age and sex. Overall, the percentages of men and women is maximum at 2006 but the percentage of women is less than men.

The graph describe the percentage of men and women licence in 1975/76 is not maximum but it is full at 2006.Where the age of 50-59 and 60-69 in the men is same and 40-40 to 30-39 is almost same but there are some minoe difference between them.On the other hand the women percentage is very low at the age of 70.30-39 and 40-49 it was good at 80 percent.For example, the ratio af women and men is differ but at some point it was at same point.the percentage of women at 70 is very low where men have high.

in conclusion, people that holding full driving such as age and sex the value of women is less than men but in same age their are at same place.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response attempts to summarise the main features of the chart, noting the overall difference between men and women as well as changes between 1975/76 and 2006. However, the attempt to report specific data points is extremely vague, confusing, and poorly supported. For instance, phrases like '40-40 to 30-39 is almost same' and 'the percentage of women at 70 is very low where men have high' lack precision and fail to properly interpret the numerical data. The overview is overly simplistic, and the overall selection and reporting of data do not fully satisfy the requirements for a clear, well-supported summary. This places the response at band 4.5.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response shows an attempt to structure the text with an introductory sentence, a body section, and a concluding remark. However, paragraphing is extremely weak, with major ideas clumped together and a very short, unhelpful conclusion. Logical progression is frequently disrupted by broken syntax and confusing transitions such as 'Where the age of 50-59 and 60-69 in the men is same'. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, making it difficult to follow the relationships between ideas. Overall organisation lacks cohesion and coherence.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, heavily relying on words directly copied from the prompt such as 'percentage', 'people', 'holding', 'driving', 'licences', 'age', and 'sex'. There are significant word choice and collocation errors, such as 'people that holding' instead of 'people holding', 'licence' used where 'licences' or 'licence holders' is intended, and 'minoe difference' (minor). The lexical range is severely limited, restricting the writer's ability to discuss the visual data with precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying primarily on simple sentences coupled with frequent structural failures and run-on constructions. There are persistent errors in basic grammar, including subject-verb agreement issues ('the percentages of men and women is maximum'), missing articles ('in great britian'), and incorrect verb forms ('The graph describe', 'that holding'). Punctuation and capitalization are also erratic, notably missing capital letters for 'great britian' and at the start of sentences like 'in conclusion'. These errors frequently cause strain and confusion for the reader.

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