Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the presented bar charts compare the men and women who have full driving licences on the basis of age and gender in Britian.

Overall, it can be fetched that in 20s more male and female holding driving licence withrespect to 19s, however by age distribution the majority of middle aged males and females retain full driving licences rather than young and old age people.

In the years 1975/76, Men hold licences more than women but if we see age wise distribution , this is dramatically different in each age group. the highest proportion of people who owned driving licences are from age 50-59 with approximately 90% of licences. followed by people from age 40-49 and 30-39 respectively and both hold almost same proportion of licences which was 80 percent at that time. Meanwhile

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response addresses the task only minimally and fails to meet the required word count of 150 words, stopping abruptly at 133 words. While the student attempts to provide an overview and mentions some data points, the selection of information is limited and underdeveloped. For instance, the reference to the year 1975/76 contains inaccurate data interpretations and generalisations that do not accurately reflect the provided chart. Furthermore, the response trails off mid-sentence, leaving the summary incomplete. To reach a higher level, the student must ensure the response is fully developed, exceeds the minimum word length, and accurately reports key comparative data without relying on vague or incorrect assertions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some basic organisation attempted through introductory phrasing and transition words such as "Overall" and "Meanwhile". However, the overall progression lacks clarity due to choppy sentence structures and mechanical cohesive devices. Paragraphing is not properly sustained, and the abrupt ending disrupts the flow of information. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as the ambiguous phrase "in 20s more male and female holding driving licence withrespect to 19s". To improve, the writer needs to ensure logical sequencing between sentences, avoid abrupt cut-offs, and use cohesive devices more accurately to guide the reader smoothly through the comparison of data.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The lexical resource is limited and basic, with frequent vocabulary errors and awkward phrasing that restrict precision. Examples of unnatural word choice include "fetched" instead of deduced or seen, and "age wise distribution". There are also spelling errors such as "Britian" and "withrespect". While the vocabulary is adequate to convey a very basic meaning, these noticeable lexical inaccuracies and repetitive terms prevent the response from achieving a higher band. To enhance this area, the student should incorporate a wider range of precise vocabulary suited for academic data reporting, such as terms for proportions, trends, and demographic categories, while checking for correct spelling and word formation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The grammatical range is limited, relying mostly on simple structures and basic sentence patterns. When the student attempts more complex sentences, frequent errors occur. Examples include missing auxiliary verbs and incorrect verb forms in phrases like "more male and female holding driving licence" and "Men hold licences more than women". Punctuation and article usage are also inconsistent, with missing capitalisation on proper nouns like "Britian" and spacing issues around punctuation marks. These frequent errors in grammar and structure can cause some difficulty for the reader. To improve, the student needs to practice forming complete, grammatically accurate sentences with correct subject-verb agreement and tense consistency.

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