Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.5)

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coconsiderably between 1975 to 70 and 2006

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response makes an attempt to address the task by highlighting some main features from the bar chart, such as the overall higher proportion of men holding driving licences and the narrowing gender gap between 1975 and 2006. However, the treatment of the data is only partial and contains numerous inaccuracies, garbled figures, and misinterpretations of the chart years and age groups (for instance, referencing years like '19 9596' and '2000' instead of 1975/76 and 2006). Key comparisons are obscured by unclear phrasing and missing data points, resulting in an underdeveloped overview that lacks a clear, consistent focus on the overall trends across the decades.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text suffers from severe disruptions in coherence and progression. The information is presented in a fragmented manner without logical sequencing or clear paragraphs, making it extremely difficult to follow the development of ideas. Cohesive devices are largely absent, misused, or buried under severe typographical and transcription errors. Referencing between pronouns and the data they represent is frequently unclear. While there are some basic attempts to link contrasting points using words like 'Butt', the overall arrangement lacks an effective organizational structure, resulting in disjointed and confusing progression throughout the response.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The lexical resource is severely limited and inadequate for a clear report of statistical data. The vocabulary is repetitive and basic, relying heavily on words from the prompt with frequent spelling errors and word-form confusion, such as 'comapre' for compare, 'P proportion' for proportion, and 'rise t two' for rose to. There are noticeable lexical inaccuracies that cause significant difficulty for the reader, and attempts to use less common vocabulary are unsuccessful due to distorted forms and incorrect collocations. The strain on the reader is high throughout the response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of fragmented or poorly constructed simple sentences. There are frequent and systematic errors in basic grammar, including verb tenses ('the figure has rise'), missing articles, incorrect prepositions, and faulty subject-verb agreement. Attempts at complex sentence forms are heavily flawed and breakdown completely. These frequent errors disrupt the flow and cause considerable difficulty for the reader in understanding the intended meaning of the sentences.

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