Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graphs illusrates the people in great britain holding full licences by age and sex.

In the graphs age start form 17 year to 70 and over and two type one is men and other is woman .White colour show the years of 1975\76 and black colour show the year 2006 .

Men 17 to 20 age in 1975\76 full car driving licence holders was 37 percent and in 2006 is 38 percent.21to 29 age in 1975\96 was 78 percent and in 2006 was 76. 40to 49 in 1975\76was91 percent and in 2006 was 93 percent . 50 to 59 in 1975\76 was 95 percent in 2006 was 76 percent .60 to 69 in 1975\76 was 59 percent and in 2006 was 94 percent. 70and over in 1975\76 was 35 percent and in 2006 77 percent.

woman 17 to 20 in 1975\76 was 20 percent and in 2006 was 30 percent .21 to 29 41 percent in 1975\76 and in 2006 was 62 percent .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and report several figures, including the low starting point for women aged 70 and over in 1975/76 and the rise for older men by 2006. However, the response only minimally summarises the visual: it gives a sequence of figures rather than an overview of the main patterns, and it omits women’s results for most age groups. Several figures are also substantially inaccurate: for example, men aged 40–49 are reported as 91% and 93%, rather than about 81% and 89%, while the 2006 figure for men aged 50–59 is given as 76% instead of about 92%. Add a clear overview and select accurate comparisons across both sexes and years.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic structure: an opening, a short description of the chart’s categories, and separate sections for men and women. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is grouped. However, the progression is difficult to follow because most of the body is a run of figures with little comparison or linking. The women’s section stops after two age groups, leaving the account unbalanced, and punctuation such as “21to 29” and “70and over” makes the data harder to scan. Organise the body into clear comparisons, use consistent age-group formatting, and connect related changes with phrases such as “by contrast” or “while”.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant basic terms such as “full car driving licence holders,” “age,” “sex,” and “percent,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the vocabulary is repetitive and some choices are inaccurate or awkward: “line graphs” misidentifies the bar chart, “two type” is unclear, and “White colour show” describes the legend in an unnatural way. Spelling and formatting also weaken precision, as in “illusrates,” “great britain,” and “woman” when referring to women as a group. Use standard chart language and a wider set of reporting verbs, for example “bar chart,” “compares,” “stood at,” and “increased.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most of the response relies on short, simple statements, and there is little evidence of varied sentence structures. Frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries make the account difficult to read smoothly. For example, “The line graphs illusrates” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “White colour show the years” lacks an article and correct verb agreement. In the data section, clauses such as “in 2006 is 38 percent” do not use a consistent past-tense reporting structure, and several figures run together without spaces or full stops. Practise accurate patterns such as “The proportion of men aged 17–20 was…” and combine comparisons using “whereas” or “while.”

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