Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.5)

I analyze the charts and in my opinion men has more license than women. i think that from age 30 to 70 in men have more license while women have lower than that of men but also i realized that number of license in men are almost similar to women in age between 17 to 20. but from the age 21 to 29 the number of license for men are gradually increases. it also indicates that of the number of increasing and having a license in men in any age have a more chance to get an accident as compared to women. and I strongly believe that women lives longer than men bcz women are sensitive and take less risk than men also I analyze that number of men and women who have driving license are almost same in age between 30 to 59. I also get inspired that in britain there is no gender discrimination by saw the numbers .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies a broad comparison—that men generally held more licences than women—and notes that the figures for the youngest group were relatively close. However, it does not provide a clear, accurate overview of the chart’s main patterns or report supporting figures. The claim that men’s licence ownership gradually increases from ages 21 to 29 is not supported: the male figure falls from about 78% to 70% between 1975/76 and 2006. The statement that men and women were almost the same from 30 to 59 is also inaccurate, particularly for 1975/76. Comments about accident risk, women living longer, and gender discrimination are speculation rather than information shown by the chart. Focus on the two years, age-group trends, and key contrasts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to connect ideas using phrases such as “while,” “but,” and “also,” and the response stays broadly focused on licence holders. However, it reads as one continuous sequence of personal reactions rather than a clearly organised chart summary. There is no distinct overview followed by grouped comparisons, and several points shift abruptly from licence figures to accidents, lifespan, and discrimination. Repeated openings such as “I think,” “I realized,” and “I also get inspired” make the progression difficult to follow. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and paragraphs comparing age groups or years; use linking words to show relationships between the data rather than personal opinions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “age,” “number,” “license,” and “gender discrimination,” so the general subject is usually understandable. However, vocabulary is repetitive and several choices are imprecise for describing a chart: “more license” and “number of license” do not clearly express the proportion of people holding licences. Informal wording such as “bcz” and evaluative phrases such as “get inspired” are unsuitable for an academic summary. Use precise data language and vary expressions for increases, decreases, and comparisons. For example, describe the percentage of licence holders, say that a figure “rose” or “fell,” and compare the proportions in specific age groups. This would make the account clearer and more appropriately formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to combine ideas in longer sentences, for example with “while” and “but,” and the reader can generally identify the intended topic. However, control is uneven, especially in subject–verb agreement and sentence construction. Examples include “men has,” “number of license … are,” and “women lives,” where the verb does not agree with its subject. Phrases such as “from age 30 to 70 in men have” and “the number of increasing and having a license” are structurally unclear. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, including the lowercase “i” and long sentences joined without clear boundaries. Practise accurate simple comparisons first, then build longer sentences with controlled clauses.

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