Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar graph illustrate the proportions of full car driving licence holder by theri sex and it's in Great Britain in the year 1975/76 and 2006.

Overall, men represent highest proportions in the adult age while female also experience more in adult age in 1975/76 . wheares women lowest proportions in old and teenager age while male latest proportions in teenage age .

man has accounted the full driving licence holder represent highest in age group 60 to 69 and 50 to 59 around 90% in 2006 world 79% and 59% in 1975 / 76. followed by the age 40 to 49 and 32 39 climbed rapidly and reached in a pic at 85% and 84% in 2006 also in 1975 and 76 has increased significantly nearly 81% in age 40 to 49 and 42% in age 32 39. however is 70 to 20 has desperate lowest proportions around 39% and 38% in 1975 76 and 2006.

women watch dramatically increase and reach in a peak

in age group 42 49 and 30 to 39 around the 80% in both.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the two years and make a general attempt to compare men and women, including the broad rise in women’s licence holding. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: women’s highest figures are among those aged 30–49, not simply “adult age,” while men’s highest group in 2006 is 50–59, at about 92%. Several details are misreported or difficult to interpret. For example, the 70-and-over male figures are about 35% and 77%, not “39% and 38%,” and the teenage figures are not the lowest for men in 1975/76. The final paragraph gives only a partial account of women’s data. Select the clearest overall patterns, then support them with accurate, clearly identified age groups and comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview and separate discussion of men and women. This gives the reader a basic sense of the intended structure. However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow because several comparisons are compressed into long, unclear sentences, and the overview does not clearly guide the details that follow. Phrases such as “followed by the age 40 to 49 and 32 39” and “however is 70 to 20” make it hard to identify which groups and years are being compared. Use one paragraph for the overview and one for each sex, and present age groups in a consistent order. Clear linking phrases should connect comparisons rather than substitute for precise information.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “proportions,” “age group,” “increased” and “reached a peak,” showing an attempt to describe chart trends. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear. Examples include “male latest proportions,” “women watch dramatically increase,” and “desperate lowest proportions”; these do not communicate the intended trends naturally. There are also spelling and form errors such as “theri,” “wheares” and “pic.” Aim for accurate, conventional chart language and check spelling carefully. For instance, describe figures as “the proportion of licence holders,” and use “rose” or “increased” for upward movement and “was lowest” for a minimum.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple and more extended sentence forms, but control is inconsistent, and errors frequently make comparisons difficult to understand. The opening sentence has problems with agreement and possessive structure (“graph illustrate” and “holder by theri sex”), while the overview contains incomplete or poorly connected clauses. In the body, “man has accounted the full driving licence holder represent highest” lacks a clear grammatical structure, and the sequence of figures is not joined into a complete comparison. Use a reliable pattern such as “Among men aged 50–59, the figure rose from about 76% in 1975/76 to 92% in 2006.” Check subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries, and favour shorter complete sentences before attempting more complex ones.

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