Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrate the percentage of of people holding full driving licences in great britain by age and sex.

Overall, in this bar chart this shows the number of licences of men and women in all ages 1976 with the passage of time increases.In 1975 to 1976 in britain the licences of women was not much in the age of 17 to 20 and the men licences in teen age is more then the womens.but with the passage of time it,s increases in women and men also hold licenses more then women .

In 1975 to 1976 in britain the teen age womens were not having much licences in the age 21 to 29 the womens get 42 percent licences but with passage of time in 20s women increases the number of licences .

on the other side the men in britain in the teen age compare to womens they have much licences holding with the passage of time in 20s they already have gain much licences holding .

At the end both have much difference in licences holding but in age of 70 men increases licences holding.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s subject and make a relevant broad comparison: women’s licence holding rose over time, while men generally had higher figures. However, the overview is unclear and does not accurately summarise the main pattern across age groups. The claim that men’s figures increased “in all ages” is not supported: among 21–29-year-olds, the male figure fell from about 78% to 70%, while the youngest group changed little. You mention women aged 21–29 at about 42%, but do not compare this with the other age groups or the 2006 figure. Select key contrasts more precisely, such as the strong rise among older women and the high 2006 rates for middle-aged men and women.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has paragraph breaks and attempts to organise information with “Overall,” “on the other side,” and “At the end.” These signals show an effort to structure the report, but the progression is difficult to follow because the same broad points are repeated and the age groups are not presented in a clear sequence. For example, the discussion moves from teenage women to women in their twenties, then to men, without systematically comparing the two years or sexes. Some links are also unclear, particularly “with the passage of time it,s increases.” Group the overview separately, then compare the main age patterns in a logical order, using clear references to 1975/76 and 2006.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on “licences,” “much,” “increases,” and “with the passage of time.” This limits precision when describing chart data; for instance, “the number of licences” is less suitable than describing the percentage of people holding licences. Some expressions, such as “teen age” and “men licences,” are imprecise or unnatural, and spelling and apostrophe use in “it,s” reduce accuracy. You do communicate the general topic, but need a wider set of accurate terms for trends and comparisons. Practise phrases such as “the proportion rose,” “remained broadly stable,” and “was higher than,” while keeping the wording concise and factual.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts at longer sentences and an overview, but grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between ideas unclear. The opening has subject–verb disagreement and a duplicated word: “The bar chart illustrate the percentage of of people.” Other examples include “the licences of women was not much” and “the men in britain … they have much licences holding,” where agreement, sentence construction, and article or plural use are problematic. Punctuation and spacing are also inconsistent, as in “increases.In.” Build accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled comparisons using forms such as “The proportion of women holding licences increased, whereas the figure for young men changed little.”

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