Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Generally we all need a license to drive all over the world but today we will talk about car driving license holders in great britain from age 17 to 20 25percent of women hold license and 35 percent of men and from age 21 to 29 65 percent women and 70 percent men are license holders and these numbers had a big difference when the age factor almost reaches to 70years old , where 70 percent men are license holders and only 25 percent of them are women so as people aged in great britain women are not interested in license and men have a significant higher number of driving license by gender difference so yeah men are the winners here and take the lead as the world is dominated by men as hence proved in all directions and attributes also in great Britain so that's all about tne data says according to the passage

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies a relevant overall contrast: men generally have higher licence-holding rates, while women’s rates rise substantially in the later year. It also includes some figures for younger and older groups. However, the account is selective and several figures do not match the chart: for example, women aged 17–20 are about 20% in 1975/76 and 33% in 2006, not 25%; women aged 21–29 are about 43% and 63%, not 65% in both years. The claim that women become less interested as they age is not supported, since rates vary by age and year. A clearer overview and accurate comparisons across both years and age groups are needed; the comments about men being “winners” do not report the data objectively.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic progression from younger age groups to older people, and the response attempts to connect comparisons with phrases such as “and” and “where.” However, nearly the entire answer is one long sentence, so the reader has difficulty separating the overview, figures and conclusions. The sequence also becomes unclear when it moves from the 21–29 group to “almost reaches to 70years old,” without explaining which year or age band is being compared. Informal asides such as “so yeah” and “that’s all about” interrupt the report’s flow. Organise the response into short paragraphs, use one sentence for the main overview, and group comparisons by age range or year with clear linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant topic vocabulary, including “license holders,” “age factor,” “percentage” and “gender difference,” so the subject is generally recognisable. However, vocabulary is repetitive and several expressions are imprecise or unsuitable for an academic chart summary. “Men are the winners here” and “the world is dominated by men” are subjective claims rather than neutral descriptions, while “women are not interested in license” makes an unsupported inference. The repeated phrase “license holders” could be varied with “licence-holders” or “people holding a full driving licence.” Use precise terms such as “proportion,” “rate” and “increased,” and check spelling and word forms, including “Great Britain” and “the data show.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to combine several comparisons in a complex sentence, but control is limited: the long opening sentence contains multiple clauses joined without clear punctuation, making relationships between ideas difficult to follow. There are also errors in sentence construction and agreement, as in “as hence proved,” and the phrase “as people aged in great britain women are not interested” lacks clear grammatical structure. Articles and prepositions are also inconsistent, for example “hold license” and “from age 17 to 20.” Capitalisation and punctuation are weak, with no clear sentence boundaries. Use shorter, complete sentences and practise accurate comparative structures, such as “The proportion of women aged 30–39 rose from 49% to 78%.”

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