Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The graph below illustrates the proportion of people holding full driving licenses in Great Britain by age and gender.
Overall, the large proportion of male and female from age 50-59 and 40-49, holding full car driving licenses between 1975/76 and 2006. Whereas the lowest number of percentage experienced in a group of people who belongs to 17-20 in both men and women.
In Great Britain, 84% of mid-age around 30-39, 82% of elder people aged just about 40-49 accounted for the highest proportion men hold license in the year 1975/76. While
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response identifies the chart’s subject and attempts an overview, noting that licence holding is high among middle-aged groups and low among 17–20-year-olds. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: the youngest group is not consistently the lowest, since men aged 70 and over had a lower figure than young men in 1975/76. The response also gives only a small part of the data, and the claim that men aged 30–39 and 40–49 had the highest proportions in 1975/76 overlooks the higher figure for men aged 40–49 than 30–39 and other close age groups. The answer is incomplete and contains only 91 words, below the required 150. Report the main changes by year and sex, with accurate comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an introductory sentence is followed by an overview and then a detail paragraph. This gives the reader some sense of the intended structure. However, progression stops abruptly at “While”, leaving the final sentence unfinished and the comparison undeveloped. The overview also combines several ideas in a confusing way, and “Whereas” does not connect clearly to a complete main clause. Because so little information is presented, there is no sustained sequence of comparisons across age groups, sexes, or years. Complete each paragraph, use clear topic sentences, and group details logically—for example, describe the overall changes first, then compare men and women.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “proportion”, “holding full driving licenses”, “age”, and “percentage”, so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several choices are unnatural or imprecise, such as “large proportion of male and female” and “lowest number of percentage”. “Elder people” is also not an appropriate way to describe an age category in this context, while “mid-age” is vague. These choices make parts of the overview difficult to interpret. Use standard chart language consistently, such as “the proportion of men and women”, “the lowest percentage”, and “older age groups”, and vary verbs with accurate options such as “stood at”, “rose”, and “accounted for”.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response attempts a few longer structures, including “Whereas the lowest number of percentage experienced…” and “84% of mid-age around 30-39… accounted for…”. However, these constructions are often incomplete or faulty, and the final “While” clause has no main clause. There are also frequent problems with agreement and sentence structure: “the large proportion of male and female … holding” lacks a clear finite verb, and “a group of people who belongs” has incorrect agreement. Articles and prepositions are also awkward in phrases such as “in a group of people”. These errors sometimes make the intended meaning unclear. Practise complete subject–verb sentences and use a controlled range of comparisons, checking agreement and clause completion.
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