Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph chart illustrates the proprtion of the individuals holding proper driving licences in uk by according to their age and gender.

To begin with, men with age over 70 in 1975 it is significantly least. Although in 2006 its is rapidly increased. on the conrast, in 60-69 in 1975 it is become in the middle but, in the 2004 its reach their entire peak. Eventough,in the age of 50-59 individuals in the factor of driving licences they only remained fewer less than 80 or, in the 2006 its reached more than the 80

Moreover, in the age of the 40 to 49 individuals men are quite more than the womens mens are out of the 80, but womens are more in 2004 whereas as in 21 to 29 age mens are constantly make driving lisecnce as comapres to womens in the 1975 or in the 1976 they point their reached and get 60 but womens are more then 60 percentage. while in the age of the 17 to 20 mens are quite less even womens are also more in the 2006 men are only less than the 40 percentage and, womens are least than in the percentage of 40 its about 35 ratio womens

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the broad subject and make some relevant comparisons across age groups and years, including the rise among men aged 70 and over and the contrast between men and women aged 40–49. However, the response does not provide a clear overview of the main patterns, and several comparisons are inaccurate or difficult to interpret. For example, you say women aged 21–29 were “more then 60 percentage” in 1975/76, although the chart shows about 43%; the figure above 60% applies to 2006. You also refer to 2004 rather than 2006 and give no clear account of the overall rise in women’s licence holding. Select the main trends, report accurate figures, and distinguish the two years consistently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response into an opening and two body paragraphs, and linking expressions such as “To begin with,” “Moreover” and “on the contrast” show an effort to connect points. However, the information does not progress in a clear, systematic order: age groups and sexes are mixed within long sentences, and some comparisons are hard to follow. The second paragraph, for instance, moves from ages 40–49 to 21–29 and then 17–20 without clearly separating the comparisons. Several connectors are also used inaccurately or awkwardly, while punctuation and sentence boundaries make the relationships between ideas unclear. Group the data logically, use one paragraph for each clear comparison, and make each sentence express a complete, focused point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “age,” “gender,” “percentage” and “increased,” so the reader can recognise the topic. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling and word-choice problems strain understanding. Examples include “proprtion,” “lisecnce,” “comapres” and “womens”; “proper driving licences” is also not a natural way to describe full licences. Phrases such as “entire peak,” “remained fewer less than 80” and “35 ratio” do not communicate the data precisely. Build a small set of accurate chart-description expressions, such as “the proportion of licence holders,” “rose to,” “stood at” and “compared with,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentences and use comparison structures, but control of sentence formation is weak, with frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and punctuation. For example, “men with age over 70 in 1975 it is significantly least” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “in 2006 its is rapidly increased” has incorrect pronoun use and verb form. The sentence beginning “in the age of the 40 to 49 individuals men…” also contains several clauses joined without clear boundaries, making the meaning difficult to follow. Most sentences are not reliably accurate, and the limited control of complex structures affects clarity. Practise writing short, complete comparisons first, then combine them using accurate clauses such as “The figure for men rose, whereas the proportion for women remained lower.”

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