Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar graph illustrates the percentage of people holding full driving licenses in Great Britain by different age groups and genders.

Overall, In 1957/76, the proportion of males earned full driving licence, was the highest in all ages as compared with females, while in 2006, women’s and men’s performed relatively similar till age 60-69, whereas female declined significantly in age 70 and above.

In 1957/76, age 17-20 males was lowest accounted for 38% and it reached to 39% by 2006, whereas females was at just 20% it increased roughly at 35%. Among age 21-29 female recorded lowest at 40% in 1976, while male was double at 80%. In 2006, male and female was contributed at 70% and 62% respectively. At age 30-39 women was just 43% and it steadily rose to approximately 82% by men in 1975/76, followed by 79% and 81% comprised by man and women in 2006.

Turning to age 40-49, 40% of female had gained the licence which increased to nearly at 81% by man in 1976, in following year men and women gradually rose to earlier year at 80% to 81% respectively. Among age 50-59 the proportion women increased significantly from approximately 22% to 79% by 2006, while men was 79% it surged to around 95% which was comparatively higher then female. In 1975/76, women represented at just over 15%, followed by 60% of men. In contrast, by 2006 women increased at 60% as compared to year 1975, whereas men raise slightly at 95% which was similar to age 50-59. Furthermore, age 70 and above women was around 2% and men at 39% in 1975/76, followed by 2006, women reached at around 30%, men at approximately 80% which was noticeable increased then women.

In summary, age between 30 and 59 the performance of holding driving licence by women was considerably higher in 2006 as compared with year 1975/76, However, age 40-69 the men was highest at nearly 95% which higher.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the broad comparison between men and women and include figures from all age groups, so the response is relevant to the chart. However, the overview is unclear and contains an inaccurate claim: in 2006, the sexes were not “relatively similar till age 60-69”; the gaps remain substantial in several groups, such as 50–59 (92% for men versus 74% for women). Some figures are also misreported, including women aged 30–39 in 1975/76 (49%, not 43%) and men aged 50–59 in 2006 (92%, not 95%). The final summary is confusing and incorrectly suggests men were highest across ages 40–69. Select the main trends more accurately and avoid repeating details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, an attempted overview, and body paragraphs, and it generally moves through the age groups. However, the organisation is weakened by repetition and unclear progression. The final paragraph repeats the 60–69 and 70-plus comparisons already mentioned, while the concluding sentence introduces a broad claim that conflicts with earlier details. Linking phrases such as “Turning to,” “In contrast,” and “Furthermore” help signal movement, but some are used where the relationship between figures is not clear. Grouping the data into meaningful patterns—for example, younger adults, middle-aged groups, and older adults—and giving each paragraph a clear comparison would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “increased,” “declined,” and “approximately,” and the reader can usually understand the intended comparisons. However, the range is limited by repeated or imprecise expressions, and several collocations are unnatural: “males earned full driving licence,” “female recorded lowest,” and “men and women was contributed.” Some word choices also obscure the data, such as “performance” for licence ownership and “surged” for a modest rise. Spelling and form errors, including “then” where “than” is intended, further reduce precision. Aim for standard reporting phrases such as “the proportion holding a licence” and use verbs like “rose,” “fell,” or “stood at” accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt complex comparisons using clauses and time references, but grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between figures difficult to interpret. Examples include “the proportion of males earned,” “age 17-20 males was lowest,” and “men and women was contributed,” where agreement and sentence structure are faulty. Articles and plurals are also inconsistent, as in “female had gained the licence” and “women was.” Tense and comparison patterns are not reliably controlled, for example “it increased roughly at 35%” and “higher then female.” Punctuation and capitalisation are uneven, including “Overall, In” and the capitalised “However” mid-sentence. Build shorter, accurate comparison sentences before adding more complex clauses.

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