Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This is about the car licences holders by sex and age.

In 1975/76 percentage of man who get licence of car is 38 and woman are 20 percent but in 2006 man parcentage is 49% and women percentage are 33%.The age rang of 17 to 20.In 1975/76 man are 78%and woman are 42% but in 2006 man are 70% and woman are 62%.the age range is 21 to 29.age rang of 30 to 39 in 1975/76 man are 83% and woman are 50% but in 2006 man are 84% and woman are 89%.age range of40 to 49 in 1975/76 man are 82% and woman are 38%.in 2006 man are 84% and woman are 80%.age 50 to 59 in 1976/75 man are 77% and woman are 23% but in 2006 man are 90% and woman are 77%.age range 60 to 69 in 1975/76 man are 59% and woman are 15% but in 2006 man are 89% and woman are 63%.age over 70 in 1976/75 man are 35% and woman are 3% but in 2006 man are 77% and woman are 32%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s subject and report figures across all seven age groups, including the broad rise in women’s licence holding by 2006. However, the response is mainly a sequence of figures rather than a summary of the main features: it has no clear overview comparing the two years or highlighting the persistent difference between men and women. Several figures are also inaccurate, such as reporting 89% for women aged 30–39 in 2006 (about 78%) and 84% for men aged 30–39 (about 87%). The opening figures of 38% and 49% are not overall totals shown in the chart. Select the most important patterns, give an accurate overview, and use only representative comparisons to support it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows the age groups in a generally understandable order, and repeated use of “but” helps signal some comparisons between years. However, it is presented as one continuous block, with no distinct introduction, overview, or organised detail paragraphs. The repeated formula “in 1975/76 … but in 2006 …” makes the progression mechanical, while fragments such as “The age rang of 17 to 20” interrupt the flow and leave relationships unclear. Group the information into an introduction and overview, followed by logically organised comparisons—for example, younger versus older groups or men versus women—and use linking phrases to show the main trends rather than listing every category.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “percentage,” “age range,” “man,” and “woman,” so the reader can usually identify what is being compared. However, the range is limited and repetitive, with “age range” and “man are … woman are …” recurring throughout. Several word forms and spellings reduce accuracy, including “licences holders,” “parcentage,” and “rang.” Some expressions are also imprecise: “get licence of car” is less natural than “hold a driving licence,” and “the age range is 21 to 29” does not clearly connect to the figures. Use accurate chart language such as “licence holders,” “proportion,” “rose,” and “remained higher than,” while varying phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to compare two years within sentences, using structures such as “in 1975/76 … but in 2006 …,” and the reader can often recover the intended meaning. However, sentence patterns are very limited, and errors in agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries occur repeatedly. Examples include “percentage of man,” “woman are 20 percent,” and “man are 78%and woman are 42%.” The opening also lacks a complete, accurate grammatical construction, and several age-group statements are fragments rather than full sentences. Practise forming complete sentences with plural subjects (“men” and “women”), consistent past-tense reporting, and clear punctuation. For example: “Among 17–20-year-olds, the figures were 36% for men and 20% for women in 1975/76.”

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.