Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The graphs below show thw presentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britians by age and sex.First the men who are in betwen 17-20 have about above 35 percent licences in 2006 more than [redacted phone] . But women have about 35 percent licences in the year 2006 more than 1975- 1976.Second the men who are in betwen 21-29 have above 60 percent licences in the year 2006 m0re than [redacted phone] .as comparison to women have licences above 70 percent licencesin the year 2006 more than [redacted phone]t.Third the men in betwen 30 -39 have licences 80 percen above licences in the years 2006 more than [redacted phone].Fourth the men in lie betwen 40 -649 the persentage is more than2006 as comparison to [redacted phone] .the women have licences 80 persent and more than 1975.-1976.Fifth the men are betwen 50-59 have about 90 persent licences in the year 2006 and more than the year [redacted phone].

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies that licence ownership generally increased between 1975/76 and 2006, and it makes some age- and sex-based comparisons. However, it reports only a narrow selection of the chart and gives no clear overall summary of the main patterns. Several comparisons are unclear or inaccurate: for ages 21–29, men were at about 70% in 2006, below their 1975/76 figure of about 78%, not higher; the statement about women in this age group is also confused. The response omits the substantial rise among older women and the contrasting changes among younger men. It is also 145 words, below the required 150. To improve, include a concise overview and select accurate comparisons across both sexes and age groups.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic sequence, using “First,” “Second,” “Third,” and “Fourth” to move through age groups, so the reader can see an attempt to organise the information. However, this list-like structure does not develop into a clear overview or a balanced comparison of the chart. Ideas are often joined awkwardly, as in “as comparison to women,” and the repeated “more than 1975-1976” makes the progression mechanical. There is no paragraphing to distinguish an overview from supporting details, and the final point ends without a conclusion. Grouping the information into an overview followed by comparisons of men and women, with clear linking phrases such as “by contrast” and “whereas,” would make the report easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “percentage,” “licences,” “men,” “women,” and age ranges, which allows the reader to recognise the topic. However, vocabulary is repetitive and several word choices or spellings reduce clarity: “presentage,” “Great Britians,” “persent,” and “licencesin” are inaccurate, while “have licences” is repeated instead of using more precise descriptions of the proportions. Phrases such as “about above 35 percent” and “more than the year” are also unnatural for describing chart data. Use a wider range of accurate reporting language, for example “the proportion holding a licence,” “rose to,” “stood at,” and “compared with.” Check spelling and avoid repeating the same phrase for every age group.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to report comparisons in several sentences, but most sentence patterns are simple and repetitive, and grammatical control is inconsistent. For example, “the men who are in betwen 17-20 have about above 35 percent licences” has an unclear structure, while “the women have licences 80 persent and more than 1975.-1976” lacks a clear comparison and has faulty sentence construction. Tense and phrasing are also awkward in “have about 35 percent licences in the year 2006 more than 1975-1976.” Punctuation is often missing after sentence openings, and spacing around age ranges and dates is inconsistent. Practise complete comparative sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “The proportion of men aged 17–20 rose slightly from 1975/76 to 2006.”

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