Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There is a proportion of citizens in Great Britain who holds full driving license by age and sex illustrated on the graph.

Overall, the percentage increased in 2006, number of the women who hold driving license has soared, while while the figure of the men improved slightly.

In 1975, the percentage of men of 30 to 39 years old was the highest, more than 80%. This remained particularly unchanged during the period, subsequently the age group of 50 to 59 years culminated in 2006, escalating from below 80 percent to approximately 90%. The largest difference made during the period is at the age group of 70 and over, growing roughly 45% from nearly 30% to about 75%.

But in women's category, the figure has risen during the given period. The proportionof 30 to 39 years old women license holders were the highest in 1975, but the number 40 to 49 years old licensed women has surpassed it in 2006, reaching roughly 80 percent. The highest growth over time was at 60 to 69 years old group with nearly 45%. but the least is at 17-20 years old group with no more than 15% of improvement

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the broad pattern that women’s licence-holding rose substantially and that men’s figures were generally higher, and you include comparisons across both years. However, some key details are inaccurate or unclear. For men aged 30–39, the figure did not remain unchanged: it rose from about 77% to 87%. The largest male increase was among those aged 70 and over, but it was about 42 percentage points, not “45%” as a relative increase. For women, the greatest rise was among 60–69-year-olds, while the smallest was among 17–20-year-olds; these are useful comparisons, though the latter increase is about 13 points. A clearer overview and more precise reporting of the main patterns would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph about men and one about women. This helps the reader follow the broad subject, and phrases such as “But in women’s category” signal a shift. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because comparisons and changes are packed together without clear links. For example, the sentence beginning “This remained particularly unchanged” is followed by “subsequently,” although the figures describe different age groups and do not form a clear sequence. The overview also repeats “while” and does not clearly organise the main contrasts. Use topic sentences and linking expressions to show whether you are comparing years, age groups, or sexes, and make references such as “this” unambiguous.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of vocabulary for describing data, including “proportion,” “culminated,” “escalating,” and “surpassed.” Some choices are not natural or precise in this context: a percentage does not usually “culminate,” and “the largest difference made” is unclear. There are also noticeable form and spelling issues, such as “license” where British English uses “licence” as a noun, and the joined form “proportionof.” Repetition of “figure,” “percentage,” and “group” limits flexibility. Choose standard chart language and collocations, such as “the proportion rose,” “reached a peak,” and “the largest increase occurred among.” This would make your comparisons clearer and more idiomatic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses with “while” and “but,” but errors occur frequently and sometimes make relationships between ideas hard to interpret. For example, “There is a proportion of citizens … who holds” has an awkward construction and subject–verb disagreement; “the percentage of men … was the highest” also needs clearer phrasing. In “the proportion … women license holders were,” the subject and verb do not agree. Tense use shifts between past and present (“has risen” alongside descriptions of 1975 and 2006), and punctuation is inconsistent, including the lower-case “but” after a full stop. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and check agreement in longer sentences.

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