Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrate the percentage of men and wome holding full driving licences in great britain by age 17 to 70 and sex.

Overall, we can see the mens full car driving licence holders the highest quntity was 50,59 this age was full car driving licence. The women 40-49 ages in the year 2006 have full licence car. whereas we have the see the year of 1975/76 the women ages 40-49 have to much low licence car.

Mens started the ages car driving , if have 17 ages then he was started the card drive.the have car licence only 30,35 people have licence.if we compare the year 1975/76 to 2006 same 35% persons have licance. The highest quantity have licence have the ages was 30-39 have licence car 70 to 80 persons have licence.

Womens car started driving compare to mens same ages started drive car. Women the year 2006 have 40%-80% licence. The year was 1975/76 the quantity to much used licence. The year 2006 have highest licence in the of peoples 40-49 ages womens have highest licence. The 1975/76 to much low have womes licence in the ages 70 and over have low quantity licence.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s subject and make some relevant comparisons, including that women aged 40–49 had a high licence rate in 2006 and that women aged 70 and over had a low rate in 1975/76. However, the overview is unclear and does not accurately summarise the main pattern: men generally had higher rates, while women’s rates rose substantially across most age groups by 2006. Some details are misreported or too vague. For example, the claim that men aged 17 had “30,35” licence holders does not match the chart’s approximate figures of 36% and 37%; the 30–39 comparison is also unclear. Select a few accurate figures and compare both sexes and years directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has separate paragraphs for an introduction, overview, and discussion of men and women, so there is an attempt to organise the information. However, ideas do not progress clearly within these sections, and several sentences are difficult to follow, such as “Mens started the ages car driving” and “The year 2006 have highest licence in the of peoples 40-49 ages.” Comparisons are repeated without being clearly connected, and linking words such as “whereas” and “if we compare” do not always clarify the relationship between figures. Use a simple structure: introduction, a concise overview of the main trends, then paragraphs comparing the age groups and years. Make each sentence express one clear comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “full driving licences,” “ages,” and “highest,” which helps identify the topic. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and inaccurate word choice or collocation often makes the meaning hard to understand. Phrases such as “highest quantity,” “to much low licence car,” and “started the ages car driving” are not natural ways to describe chart data. Spelling and word forms also need attention, for example “wome,” “mens,” “licance,” and “womes.” Build a small set of accurate expressions for describing proportions and change, such as “the proportion of licence holders,” “rose,” “fell,” and “was higher than,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a few longer sentences and comparisons, for example “whereas we have the see the year of 1975/76…,” but most sentence patterns are simple or incomplete, and frequent errors sometimes obscure the intended meaning. Problems include subject–verb agreement (“The bar chart illustrate”), missing or incorrect articles and possessives (“the mens full car driving licence holders”), and faulty verb forms (“The year 2006 have”). Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, with some ideas joined in ways that make them difficult to parse. Practise writing complete subject–verb sentences, then combine related information with accurate clauses such as “In 2006, the rate for women aged 40–49 was higher than in 1975/76.”

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