Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

In this graphs we see comparisons which peoples huldin full driving licences a mens or womens. And we see a high amount of the manes in 2006 but a but in 1975/76 low amount then manes holding driving licences. And we see a womens compare to manes in 1975/76 or 2006 womens low amount.

First one age is 17-20 in 1975/76 manes holding licences 35% 2006 peoples holding licences 36% and 70 and over in 1975/76 manes holding licences 30% or 2006 peoples holding licence 75%.

And womans age 17-20 holding licence in 1975/76 womans holding licence 20% aor 2006 womans holdig licence 30% or womans age 75 and over 1975/76 holding licenses 30% or 2006 womans holding license 5% .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the broad comparison that men generally had higher licence-holding rates than women, and it attempts to report figures for younger and older age groups. However, several figures are inaccurate: for example, men aged 17–20 were at about 36% in 1975/76 and 37% in 2006, while the response gives 35% and 36%; more seriously, women aged 70 and over rose from about 3% to 29%, not from 30% to 5%. The response also omits the important overall pattern that women’s rates rose substantially across most age groups, while men’s changes varied. There is no clear, accurate overview, and the response is below the required 150 words; the 19 words copied from the prompt are excluded from the count. Develop the main trends and check figures against the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, moving from a general comparison to figures for men and then women. This gives the reader some sense of the intended structure. However, the opening repeats the task wording, and the ideas that follow are difficult to track because several comparisons are joined in long, loosely connected sentences. Phrases such as “First one age is 17-20” do not clearly signal how the age groups relate to one another, and “or” is repeatedly used where a clearer comparison or sequence is needed. Separate the overview from the detailed comparisons, group related age bands together, and use linking expressions such as “by contrast” or “whereas” accurately. Clearer paragraphing and progression would make the information easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age,” “holding licences,” and “compare,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is narrow and repetitive, with “holding licences” and “peoples” repeated rather than using more precise chart language. Several word choices and forms are inaccurate, including “manes,” “womans,” and “a high amount,” which make parts of the description awkward or unclear. Aim for accurate terms such as “men,” “women,” “proportion,” and “licence holders,” and use verbs such as “increased,” “fell,” or “remained stable” to describe trends. Careful spelling and more varied, appropriate collocations would improve clarity and precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to communicate comparisons using simple clauses, and some intended meanings can be understood. However, sentence structures are often incomplete or inaccurately formed, as in “In this graphs we see comparisons which peoples huldin full driving licences a mens or womens.” There are recurring problems with articles, plurals, agreement, and verb forms, for example “a womens compare” and “womans holding licence.” The long sentence beginning “First one age is 17-20” also lacks clear grammatical connections between its figures. Most sentences rely on basic patterns, with little accurate variety. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use consistent past-tense reporting, for example: “Among men aged 17–20, the figure was about 36% in both years.”

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