Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In this graph we make comparsion between men and women about holding full driving licences in great britain by age and sex.firstly we make percentage about the both informations and take a veiw on the graph.At the age between 17 to 20 their are only 35 people makes their driving licence in 2006 but in 1975 the ratio is less than the ratio of 2006.Then we see a inreameant in the age between 40 to 49 the ratio of men holding driving licence in 2006 are more than 80 peoples but in 1975 the ratio of driving licence are little bit more than 80 men but when the age is over than 70 are 70 the driving ratio goes down approximately to 77 of holding licence in 2006 but in 1975 the ratios also goes more less than 40 men.But when we talk about womens at the age between 17 to 20 the womens have more than 20 plus their driving licence in 2006 but in 1975 their driving licence is equal to 20 womens.At the mid the ratio of womens goes increase about 80 womens holding the licence but in the end the over aged womens have holding the more than 20 licence in 2006 but in 1975 the ratios goes to only 7 people holding the licences of driving.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s subject and make some relevant comparisons, including the rise in women’s licence-holding among older age groups and the high figure for men aged 40–49. However, the account is only partial and several figures or comparisons are inaccurate: for example, men aged 17–20 were about 36% in 1975/76 and 37% in 2006, not 35% in 2006 with a lower earlier figure; men aged 40–49 were about 81% and 89%, so the claim that the earlier figure was higher is incorrect. The overview is also missing: state the broad pattern that men generally had higher rates, while women’s rates rose markedly over time. Select key comparisons and report them accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows a loose sequence, moving from younger men to middle-aged and older men, then to women, and uses basic linking phrases such as “Then” and “But when we talk about.” This gives the reader some sense of the chart’s categories. However, the whole response is presented as one long paragraph, and the progression is difficult to follow because several comparisons are packed into lengthy sentences. References such as “at the mid” and “in the end” are unclear, and repeated use of “but” does not always show a clear contrast. Organise the response into an introduction, a concise overview, and separate comparison paragraphs, grouping age bands and years logically.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “ratio,” “holding,” and “licence,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with “ratio” and “driving licence” used repeatedly where more precise chart language would help. Several word choices or forms are inaccurate, such as “inreameant,” “peoples,” and “over aged,” and phrases like “the mid” and “more less” are difficult to interpret. These errors sometimes make the intended comparison unclear. Build a small set of accurate terms for describing data, such as “proportion,” “share,” “increased,” “declined,” and “approximately,” and use “licence holders” rather than describing people as “holding the licence.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example with “but when” and “when we talk about,” and the reader can usually identify the broad topic of each sentence. However, sentence structures are often faulty, and errors in agreement, articles, tense, and punctuation frequently make the comparisons hard to understand. Examples include “their are only 35 people makes their driving licence,” “the ratio of men … are,” and “the over aged womens have holding.” Several sentences run together without full stops, and capitalisation is inconsistent. Use shorter, controlled sentences with a clear subject and verb—for example, “In 2006, about 37% of men aged 17–20 held a licence”—before attempting more complex comparisons.

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