Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrates the ratio of people having full driving licences in United Kingdom by age and genders. White bar shows in the years 1975 and 1976 and black bar represented year 2006. X-axis shows the persentage of men and women whereas, Y-axis represented the age.

Overall, the proportion of the men holding licence was more than a women in 1975 and 1976. However, in 2006 the ratio of women was raised.

Firstly, in the year 1975 and 1976 the most holding perentage of men was in the age 30-39 and it was more than 80. If we talk about the least ratio of men holding licences was in the age 17-20 and 70. Rest of all bit flactuated with the age.

Secondly,

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Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the chart’s subject and gives a broad comparison, noting that men had higher licence-holding proportions in 1975/76 and that women’s figures rose by 2006. However, the overview is incomplete: it does not explain that men remained ahead in most age groups in 2006, while women’s figures increased substantially across every age band. Some details are inaccurate or unclear. For example, the lowest male figure in 1975/76 was among those aged 70 and over (about 35%), not simply the 17–20 and 70 groups; the 17–20 figure was about 36%. The response also stops before describing the women’s data. It is 26 words below the required minimum. Include a complete overview and select accurate comparisons across both sexes and years.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the report with an introduction, an overview, and signposting such as “Firstly” and “Secondly”. This gives the reader some indication of the intended structure. However, progression is incomplete: the final paragraph begins “Secondly,” but contains no information, and the report ends without a conclusion or a developed account of women’s figures. The sequence also moves from a general overview to male data without clearly grouping the comparisons by year or sex. Plan two body paragraphs—for example, one comparing men’s figures across years and one covering women’s—and use linking phrases to show contrasts and changes. This would make the organisation more complete and the relationships between data clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion”, “ratio”, “age” and “fluctuated”, and the reader can generally identify the topic. However, word choice and spelling are often inaccurate or repetitive, which limits precision. “Ratio” is not the best term for percentages of licence holders; “proportion” or “percentage” is more suitable. There are also misspellings such as “persentage”, “perentage” and “flactuated”, while “most holding percentage” is an unnatural phrase. Use accurate collocations such as “the highest proportion of male licence holders” and “the figure varied slightly”. A wider range of precise terms for increases, decreases and comparisons would help describe the chart more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more complex sentence forms, including “Overall, the proportion of the men holding licence was more than a women in 1975 and 1976. However, in 2006 the ratio of women was raised.” Meaning is usually recoverable, but errors in articles, agreement and sentence construction occur frequently. For example, “a women” should be “women” or “a woman”, and “the proportion of the men … was more than a women” compares unlike things. The phrase “If we talk about the least ratio … was” is also an incomplete, awkwardly formed sentence. Practise making direct comparisons with parallel structures, such as “The proportion of men was higher than that of women,” and check articles, plurals and verb forms. More accurate sentence patterns would make the data easier to follow.

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