Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chat illustrates the proportions of people holding full driving license in great Britain by age and sex.

overall it is evident, The Largest share is 50 to 59 age of people, Meanwhile the smallest share is 17 to 20 age of people, By contrast remaining age of people increased stable Respectively.

looking at the details, In age of 50 to 59 had highest figure accounted for 83 % for both sex. On the other hand In age of 40 to 49 at

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the chart’s subject and attempts an overview, but it does not adequately summarise the main features. The claim that people aged 50–59 had the largest share is not true across the chart: men aged 50–59 were among the highest in 2006, but several male age groups were higher in 1975/76, and the youngest group was not consistently the smallest. The statement that both sexes in the 50–59 group reached 83% is also inaccurate; the approximate figures are 76% and 23% in 1975/76, and 92% and 74% in 2006. The response ends mid-sentence and omits most comparisons. It is also 66 words below the required minimum. Include a complete overview and select accurate contrasts across years, ages and sexes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by an overview and then a detail paragraph. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview makes unclear claims, and the final paragraph stops after “at,” leaving the comparison unfinished. Linking expressions such as “Meanwhile” and “On the other hand” show an effort to connect ideas, but they do not establish clear relationships between the data and are awkwardly placed. Capitalisation and punctuation also interrupt the flow, for example “overall it is evident, The Largest share…” and “Respectively.” Use separate, complete paragraphs for the overview and key comparisons, and connect each comparison explicitly to its age group, sex and year.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportions,” “age,” “sex,” “figure” and “accounted for,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “bar chat” is a spelling error, “full driving license” is less precise than “full driving licences,” and “increased stable” does not clearly describe a trend. “Largest share” and “smallest share” are repeated without specifying the relevant year or sex, which makes the comparisons imprecise. Aim for accurate terms such as “percentage,” “licence holders,” “rose,” “remained,” and “the highest proportion,” and use them to describe specific groups rather than making broad claims.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response shows an attempt to use more than simple statements, but grammatical control is inconsistent and the final sentence is incomplete. For example, “In age of 50 to 59 had highest figure” lacks a clear subject and has an incorrect sentence pattern; “the Largest share is 50 to 59 age of people” also has faulty word order and article use. The phrase “By contrast remaining age of people increased stable” does not form a complete, clear clause. Capital letters appear in the middle of sentences, while punctuation is used inconsistently. Build complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “Among men aged 50–59, the figure rose from … to …,” and check articles, tense, agreement and sentence endings.

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