Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graphs below show the percentage of people holding full driving licences in Great Britain by age and sex.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Full car driving licence holders: by sex and age

Student answer (Band 4.5)

we In the paragraph where show the age of the people who hold licence. First show the people whoes age is 17 to 20 there are 38 percent man or 38 percent womans who hold licence . Secoundly show the people whoes age is under 21 to 29 there are 76 percent man or 62 perecnt womans whoes hold licence. Thirdly show the people whoes age is under 40 to 49 there are 83 percent man or 79 percent woman who hold driving license. Fourthly show the people whoes age is under 50 to 59 there are84 percent man and 76 perecnt womans who hold driving licence. Fifthly show the people whoes age is 70 or above 78 perecent or 25 perecnt woman hold driving licence

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the general subject and report several age groups, but the response does not provide a clear overview of the main patterns or compare the two years. Most figures are presented as if they describe one set of results, although the chart separates 1975/76 from 2006. Several figures also do not match the chart: for example, men aged 21–29 were about 78% in 1975/76 and 70% in 2006, rather than 76%; and the 50–59 figures were about 76% and 92% for men, not 84%. The response also omits the 60–69 group and gives little information about change over time. It is 24 words below the required minimum. Include a concise overview and accurate, clearly labelled comparisons across both years.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic sequence, using “First,” “Secondly,” and “Thirdly” to move through age groups, so the reader can see an attempt to organise the information. However, the repeated “show the people” pattern makes the progression mechanical, and the opening fragment, “we In the paragraph where show…,” does not establish a clear introduction. There is no separate overview or grouping of the most important comparisons, such as the broad rise in licence holding among women between the two dates. Some age groups are skipped, and the final sentence does not clearly connect to the earlier sequence. Organise the report into an introduction, overview, and comparison-focused details, using linking phrases to show contrasts and changes.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “hold licence,” “driving licence,” “age,” and “percent,” and the reader can generally identify the subject of each sentence. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeated, especially “show the people” and “who hold driving licence.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, such as “whoes,” “Secoundly,” and “perecnt,” which reduce accuracy and polish. Some phrasing is not natural for describing chart data; for example, “there are 38 percent man” is less clear than a standard expression such as “38% of men held a licence.” Build a small set of accurate chart-reporting phrases and use them consistently to describe proportions, age groups, and changes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most of the response relies on a repeated simple pattern, such as “there are … percent man or … percent womans who hold licence,” so there is little variety in sentence structure. Errors in agreement and sentence construction are frequent: “38 percent man” needs a plural noun and a clearer percentage structure, while “there are” is not an appropriate way to report figures for the chart’s past dates. The opening, “we In the paragraph where show,” is incomplete and difficult to interpret. Articles and plural forms are also inconsistent, as in “hold licence” and “womans.” These errors sometimes make the comparisons unclear. Practise complete sentences with accurate past-tense reporting, for example, “In 2006, 33% of women aged 17–20 held a full licence.”

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