Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

A huge number of students choose to study English independently on a self- study basis rather than attend a formal course. However, without the assistance of a teacher, students often find it difficult to manage their studies.

To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The huge number of students choose to study english independently on a self- study basis rather than attend a formal course. BUT without understanding and without gave advice there family and choose subject.

when, the students choose subject they are very happy. Because they choose only subject you like this. Mostly, student choose english subject, Because, student considered the english interesting and easily understand able. And, they think after chosing the english subject improve your english. In the english main problem vacubalry,grammer,How chose the words.

On the other hand, the students join classes after the admission in college or school. They are nervouse about first day,they do not known in this place,Because every think in new for every students. When, the first day class, the english teacher teache the lesson and tell about the english subject. After, the class the students happy the teacher good teaches.

After the few month,the english teacher left the college about some reason. When the student know the teacher left the college and, they are know new teacher is not available now. They are very worried about the study. They do not know, how to start study specially english subject. Because any teachers do not agree teache the english subject. This time most hardest the student.

First of all, Before choosing the subject should be discussed her family member,After the discussed and choose subject. Because engish subject more difficullt comparision by urdu, another subject. Before choosing the subject students know english will be easy but they will be wrong. When, the teacher is good teache so deffinately easy but when teacher is not available so, more difficult.

i am agree the situation When, the teacher or assistance

both nt available, so , the study more hard and difficult to continuouse.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You express a relevant view that studying English becomes difficult when a teacher is unavailable, especially in the final paragraph. However, the response only partially answers the question: it does not clearly state how far you agree or disagree until the conclusion, and the position is not consistently developed. Much of the essay describes choosing a subject or a teacher leaving college, rather than explaining the general challenges of independent study and whether these support your agreement. The examples about students feeling worried and struggling to continue are relevant, but they need clearer explanation and connection to your opinion. To strengthen the response, state your position in the introduction and develop two focused reasons with specific examples. The 20 words copied from the task prompt are excluded from the reported word count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response is divided into paragraphs, and there is a basic attempt to move from choosing English, to attending classes, to the problem of a teacher leaving, and finally to your opinion. This gives the reader some sense of the topics you want to cover. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several paragraphs do not clearly support the central question, and links between ideas are often abrupt. Connectors such as “On the other hand,” “First of all,” and “Because” are used mechanically or in places where the relationship is unclear. The final opinion also appears suddenly rather than following from a developed argument. Organise the essay around two reasons for your position, use each paragraph for one main point, and make the links between examples and claims explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “independently,” “formal course,” “teacher,” and “study,” so the general subject is usually identifiable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with “student,” “teacher,” “english,” and “difficult” appearing frequently. Several inaccurate word choices or spellings make parts of the message hard to understand, such as “vacubalry,” “grammer,” “understand able,” and “the teacher good teaches.” Some phrases also do not express the intended meaning clearly, including “without understanding and without gave advice there family.” Build a more precise topic vocabulary and check spelling and word forms. For example, use “vocabulary,” “grammar,” and “receive guidance from their family” where appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both short statements and longer sentences, including clauses beginning with “When” and “Because.” However, sentence structures are very limited overall, and frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries sometimes obscure meaning. Examples include “students choose subject,” “they do not known,” “the teacher teache the lesson,” and “i am agree.” Several dependent clauses are left incomplete, as in “Because they choose only subject you like this,” while commas and full stops often divide or join ideas incorrectly. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses. For instance, “Students may struggle when their teacher leaves because they do not know how to organise their studies” would express one of your ideas clearly.

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