Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
A huge number of students choose to study English independently on a self- study basis rather than attend a formal course. However, without the assistance of a teacher, students often find it difficult to manage their studies.
To what extent do you agree or disagree ?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Now days as the technology is increase the student always wanted to study English language independently on self-basis study rather than to attend a formal course without the assistance of a teacher
i am totally agree with this that large number of people just study English language independently because the English language having a lot of books and websites for the student to learn English language and they don't want teachers for that because in teacher assistance students can't focus on English and teacher also do not help students but the other studies, they always want teacher assistance because the other studies having much difficulty for example math education chemistry and physics because in this subject they all are having a question to solve but they can't do it they also can't take help from websites
they just wanted to learn from teachers the solution of these subjects from the assistant of teacher student never faces any problem in their study they can achieve their goals easily
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 167 words. This significantly impacts the development of the argument. While you state your position clearly, the ideas are underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting evidence or examples. The comparison between English and subjects like 'math education' is somewhat tangential and does not fully address the complexities of independent language learning versus formal instruction. To improve, you must expand your arguments with detailed explanations and relevant examples to meet the length requirement and provide a more comprehensive analysis of the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a clear structure. There is no introduction or conclusion, and the text is presented as a single, poorly organized block. The use of cohesive devices is very limited; sentences are often strung together with 'and' or 'because' without proper punctuation or logical transitions. For example, the transition between the topic of English learning and other subjects is abrupt and confusing. To improve, you should organize your essay into clear paragraphs (introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion) and use a wider variety of linking words such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in contrast' to guide the reader through your argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. You frequently use simple phrases like 'study English language' and 'teacher assistance'. There is a lack of academic vocabulary or collocations appropriate for an IELTS essay. Furthermore, there are errors in word choice, such as 'Now days as the technology is increase', which should be 'Nowadays, as technology increases'. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your range of vocabulary by using more precise terms and synonyms, and ensure that your word choices are contextually accurate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There is a lack of punctuation, with many run-on sentences and a complete absence of full stops. Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, such as 'the technology is increase' instead of 'technology is increasing'. Additionally, sentence structures are simple and repetitive, lacking the complexity required for higher bands. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct punctuation, and gradually introduce complex structures like relative clauses or conditional sentences while ensuring they are grammatically accurate.
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