Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

A huge number of students choose to study English independently on a self- study basis rather than attend a formal course. However, without the assistance of a teacher, students often find it difficult to manage their studies.

To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Yes, i agree with it because some of the students are studying by their owns like they wanna study English on self-study that's mean they think that they have an ability that they can collect and get all things in very easy way, we should nt attend an class from any teacher, we can handle it from our own. But their thoughts are totally wrong because when they totally depends on self-based they will facing more problems and can't define the soultions. Some of the brilliant students have this type of ability like they study English from independently a self-study but they ill alsocontact with the teachers when they are facing any issues, but who's they believe that they define anything else from their own they are on the peak of over confident and this confidant will be planned an big pronlem for them. I know personally an student that one was in my class.He's thoughts about that he have much ability that he learned about English and get high marks in it in the final terms. We all classfellows told him that an teacher is very impoetant for learning the English but he did not listened us. So, when the final cames and we all attemped the exam of English leacture and during the exam i saw him he was very nervous and worried to solving the questions and when finished the exam i asked him how's was your exam? He told me i did't attemped all the questions. In the result day he got just 30 marks out of 100.So, i believe that students should study English from an good teacher.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear stance agreeing that students find independent study difficult and require teacher assistance. The writer attempts to support this position by providing a personal anecdote about a classmate. However, the development of ideas is limited and relies heavily on a single narrative example rather than broader argumentation. Furthermore, there is a tendency to over-generalise regarding students who choose self-study, labelling them as overconfident. While all parts of the task are addressed, the ideas are under-developed in terms of academic depth. The response satisfies the band descriptors for Band 5 due to the limited and anecdotal nature of the support provided, coupled with some lack of clarity in the position's elaboration.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks proper paragraphing, as the entire text is presented as a single, unbroken block of writing. This makes the logical organisation difficult to follow. Although cohesive devices are attempted, they are frequently inaccurate, repetitive, or poorly managed, such as the excessive use of 'so' and 'like' to link clauses. There is no clear progression of ideas from an introduction to well-defined body paragraphs and a conclusion. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, particularly with pronouns like 'they' and 'it', which makes tracing the referents challenging. These features align closely with the Band 4 descriptors, as the information and ideas are not arranged in a coherent or properly structured manner.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple words and phrases such as 'study English', 'teacher', and 'problems'. There are noticeable errors in word choice, collocation, and spelling, such as 'classfellows' instead of 'classmates', 'soultions' instead of 'solutions', 'attemped' instead of 'attempted', and 'result day' instead of 'results day'. These errors cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a limited lexical range. While the writer attempts to use less common vocabulary like 'over confident' and 'independently', inaccurate word formation and spelling constrain the score to Band 4, as the vocabulary is basic and errors frequently strain the reader's understanding.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical structure of the essay is heavily flawed, featuring run-on sentences and a lack of proper punctuation. The writer attempts complex structures, but these attempts are almost entirely faulty, such as in the sentence: 'Some of the brilliant students have this type of ability like they study English from independently a self-study but they ill alsocontact with the teachers...' There are frequent errors in tense consistency, subject-verb agreement, and clause connection throughout the text. Simple sentences also contain fundamental errors. The high frequency of grammatical mistakes causes considerable difficulty for the reader and distorts meaning in several places, placing the writing securely at Band 4.

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