Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

A huge number of students choose to study English independently on a self- study basis rather than attend a formal course. However, without the assistance of a teacher, students often find it difficult to manage their studies.

To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In modern area, it is commun to seen that English study increase singificantly in many country. But lots of student select to study English freely only self study after that go to a formal coure. Yet, other think that without no help of a mentor and somy time hard this manage their studies. Despite the arguements between the viewpoints. I do believe that latter viewpoint is much more viable.

On the one hand, there are many resonse why without support from mentor it probelm to manage this studies. To begin with, student does not keep proper knoledge, If student learn without teacher after that it result it will be very dissappointed. So every student should get for acadimic. Consequently, it convenient for student studies in addition it is great opportunity to know English.

On the other hand,

To sum up, Based on the arguements which has been represented, in my verdicit both prespectives are valid. However, it best way to learn from teacher.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a position in the introduction—“I do believe that latter viewpoint is much more viable”—and give a relevant reason, namely that learners may struggle without a mentor. However, the response addresses the question only minimally: it does not explain in detail how a teacher helps students manage their studies, and the opposing view is not developed at all. The paragraph beginning “On the one hand” contains unclear claims rather than a specific explanation or example, while “On the other hand” is left unfinished. The conclusion also shifts to saying both perspectives are valid, which weakens your earlier position. The response is 163 words, below the required 250, so there is not enough development to support the argument.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an identifiable essay shape, with an introduction, a body paragraph, and a conclusion, and phrases such as “On the one hand” and “To sum up” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, ideas are not arranged coherently enough to form a clear progression. The second body paragraph consists only of “On the other hand,” and the first body paragraph moves between claims without explaining their connection. For example, “So every student should get for acadimic” does not clearly follow from the preceding sentence. The conclusion’s claim that both perspectives are valid also conflicts with the introduction. Complete each paragraph with connected supporting points and use transitions only where they accurately reflect the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt some topic-related vocabulary, including “mentor,” “formal course,” “viewpoints,” and “opportunity,” so the reader can recognise that the essay concerns English learning. However, the range is basic and several spelling and word-choice errors make meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “commun,” “singificantly,” “resonse,” and “verdicit”; phrases such as “without no help” and “it is great opportunity to know English” are also unnatural or unclear. These problems fit a limited vocabulary range in which errors can strain the reader. Build a reliable set of expressions for independent learning, teacher guidance, study plans, and progress, and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You make some attempts to connect clauses, as in “If student learn without teacher after that it result…,” and use a few simple sentence forms. However, the range is very limited, and frequent errors in sentence structure and basic grammar sometimes distort meaning. For example, “lots of student select” lacks plural agreement, “other think” has an agreement error, and “without no help” uses an incorrect negative construction. The sentence beginning “If student learn…” has several problems with articles, verb forms, and clause structure, making the intended point hard to understand. Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent, as in “To sum up, Based…”. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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