Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

A huge number of students choose to study English independently on a self- study basis rather than attend a formal course. However, without the assistance of a teacher, students often find it difficult to manage their studies.

To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

First i believe that those students are very hard working . But i think that initilly that have some problem ,after a few days the must expert.However the teacher is notes the mistakes and guide themselves. And the teacher is very kind and sincere with students.Also the teacher motivates the students and also encourage their works.So these problem has face in our journey. But those students have determination,hardworking , honourable and sincere with our work have to achive their goal.but after some time he learn and have ability to study English independently.Nowadays the modern technology and AI have great things those encourage these students.Those students have ability and also skills to study English independtly.But these students have motivation and ability to do this work .Through English language he becomes have benefits knowledge through out of the world .Initiolly our society discourge the those students but he does not dissapoinment.Nowadays AI help those students and gave useful information about these course. I appreatiate those students because he will have ability to create new things .And those students have urge respectable job. And those students have in Allah almighty so he Allah give this success.He can learn better even this age of technology . Those technolgy such as google, chat gpt and other AI tool helps and give useful information.Today technology helps such students.but those students do not have discourage but he should work hard and achieve our goal.He learn more things through these AI tools.So he should work hard and belive our self.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You express a general view that students can learn English independently, especially with determination and modern technology, while also noting that teachers can identify mistakes and provide guidance. These points are relevant to the topic. However, the response does not clearly state how far you agree or disagree, and the discussion shifts between the benefits of teachers and independent study without resolving that contrast. Claims such as “AI help those students” and that learners can gain “benefits knowledge” are not explained with specific examples or developed reasoning. To strengthen the response, state your position clearly in the introduction, address the difficulty of managing study without a teacher, and support each main point with a relevant example and explanation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a recognisable focus on independent English study, and linking expressions such as “However,” “Also,” and “Nowadays” show an attempt to connect ideas. Nevertheless, the response reads largely as one continuous sequence rather than a clearly organised argument. Ideas about teachers, motivation, technology, employment, and faith appear without a clear progression, and several points are repeated, including that students have ability and should work hard. References such as “these problem” and “he” also make it difficult to identify exactly who or what is meant. Organise the essay into an introduction, separate body paragraphs for key reasons, and a conclusion. Use fewer repeated connectors and make each paragraph develop one central point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “independently,” “determination,” “motivates,” and “technology,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on “students,” “ability,” “work hard,” and “useful information.” Several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “the teacher is notes the mistakes,” “benefits knowledge,” and “have urge respectable job.” Spelling errors, including “initilly,” “independtly,” and “dissapoinment,” also reduce clarity. Build a more precise vocabulary for learning and support, such as “study plan,” “feedback,” and “learning resources,” and check spelling and word forms carefully. This would make your ideas easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentences and use basic connectors, but most sentence patterns are simple, and control of sentence structure is limited. Errors in verb forms and agreement occur throughout, for example, “the must expert,” “AI help,” and “he learn.” Articles, plurals, and pronouns are also inconsistent, as in “these problem” and the repeated use of “he” for students generally. Punctuation and spacing are often inaccurate, making sentence boundaries unclear. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine related ideas with clauses such as “Although students may struggle at first, they can improve by following a study plan.” Check subject–verb agreement, plural forms, and full stops when editing.

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