Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This illustration shows 3 different victims of crime in 2009 to 2010 and 2010 to 2011.

The first one is a Burglary crime perceived 15% in 2009 to 2010 but actual this is 2% in 2009 to 2010. In 2010 to 2011 13% burglary crime perceived but in real this 3%.

The secend is car crime in 2009 to 2010 21% and 2010 to 2011 17% crime perceived but in actual this is 4% in both year.

The 3rd crime is violent crime in 2009 to 2010 the violent crime noted 15% and 2010 to 2011 14% perceived but in actual this is 3% in both years.

In this illustration the car crime recorded in high level in both years but in actual this is only 4% car crime shows one of he most crime in this illustration and the other two crime burglary and violent crime is recorded low level in this illustration.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify all three crime categories and compare perceived with actual figures across both periods, so the response is relevant to the chart. You also note the main broad pattern that car crime has the highest perceived level. However, the overview is not sufficiently clear or accurate: the final paragraph calls the other categories “recorded low level” without explaining that actual likelihood is much lower than perceived likelihood for every crime type. Some figures are imprecise or incorrect: burglary actual likelihood in 2010/11 is about 2.5%, not 3%, and violent crime actual likelihood rises from about 3% to 3.5%, rather than staying at 3%. A clearer overview and more careful selection of key comparisons would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response follows a basic sequence, discussing burglary, car crime and violent crime in separate paragraphs, and the reader can generally identify which category is being described. However, the organisation is repetitive and does not build towards a clear overall summary. Phrases such as “The first one,” “The secend” and “The 3rd crime” create a list-like progression, while the final paragraph repeats the point that car crime is highest without clearly contrasting perceived and actual figures. Some links between ideas are awkward, particularly “but actual this is” and “but in real this.” Grouping the data by the main pattern, then supporting it with selected comparisons, would create clearer progression and more effective cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “perceived,” “actual,” “crime” and “recorded,” and the reader can usually understand the categories and comparisons. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “3 different victims of crime” (the chart shows crime types), “in real,” “recorded in high level” and “one of he most crime.” These choices sometimes make the intended meaning less clear. There are also spelling errors, including “secend,” which reduce accuracy. Aim for precise reporting language such as “the perceived likelihood,” “the actual rate,” “was highest” and “fell from … to …”; vary these phrases rather than repeating “crime” and “illustration.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Most sentences use simple structures, and you attempt some contrast with “but,” which helps communicate comparisons. However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between figures difficult to follow. For example, “The first one is a Burglary crime perceived 15%” lacks a clear sentence structure, while “in actual this is 4% in both year” has problems with word order and number agreement. Articles and tense are also inconsistent, as in “the violent crime noted 15%.” Use complete comparative sentences, for example, “The perceived figure for burglary was 15.5% in 2009/10, whereas the actual figure was 2%.” Practising accurate past-tense reporting and plural forms would improve clarity.

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