Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar graph compares the crime and danger perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime in different catogeries from 2009 to 2011.

Overall,the perceived crime type is the both year and the actual crime is quite low compare to perceived.The both crime fell completly down in next year cause of law.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify the chart’s general subject and attempt an overview by contrasting perceived danger with actual victimisation. However, the response does not summarise the main features adequately: it gives no crime-specific comparisons or figures, and the claim that both measures “fell completly down” is inaccurate. Perceived likelihood declined somewhat from 2009/10 to 2010/11, while actual likelihood stayed low and changed only slightly; none of the categories fell to zero. The explanation “cause of law” is not supported by the chart. The response is also only 44 words, below the required 150, and 10 words copied from the prompt are excluded from that count. Include a clear overview and select key data for each crime type.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence introduces the chart, followed by an overview beginning with “Overall”. This gives the reader a simple starting structure. However, the response is too brief to develop a logical progression or organise comparisons into clear stages or paragraphs. The phrase “The both crime” also makes the relationship between perceived and actual likelihood unclear, and “in next year” does not specify which period is being discussed. To improve, use a short introduction, a distinct overview, and one or two paragraphs comparing the three crime types across the two periods. Linking phrases such as “By contrast” and “Meanwhile” can help make those comparisons explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a few relevant terms, including “bar graph”, “perceived”, “actual likelihood” and “victim of crime”, so the topic is recognisable. However, the vocabulary range is narrow and several choices or forms are inaccurate, which limits clarity and precision. “Catogeries” is misspelled, “crime type” is used awkwardly in “the perceived crime type”, and “fell completely down” is not a suitable way to describe a modest decline. “Cause of law” introduces an unsupported explanation and is not a precise chart description. Use vocabulary that reports data directly, such as “percentage”, “declined”, “remained low” and “was highest for car crime”, while checking spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt two sentence forms, including an opening sentence and an overview introduced by “Overall”, and the main topic can still be understood. However, the structures are very limited, and errors in sentence construction and punctuation make parts difficult to interpret. In “Overall,the perceived crime type is the both year”, the comma needs a following space and the sentence lacks a clear grammatical relationship. “The both crime fell … in next year” has an unclear subject and faulty article and time expression. Practise writing complete comparisons with accurate subjects and verbs, for example, “Perceived risk was higher than actual victimisation in both periods.” Use past-tense forms consistently when describing the chart.

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