Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrates about the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime in the period od 2009 and 2010.

The information about the three categories of crime: burglary, car crime and violent crime. According to data in 2009, the perceived for car crime was high over the 20 percent and the actual was below 5 percent. In 2010, the rate of car crime was reduced to 17 percent and the actual was slightly fell 4.5 to 4 percent.

The burglary and violent crime was same in both category above 15 percent in 2009 for perceived and in 2010 was fell to 13 percent in both category. The actual in 2009 was 2 percent and in 2010 was little high to 3 percent for burglary. The actual information for violent crime was same in both was 3 percent.

Finally, the given data was clearly said that

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the three crime types and make relevant comparisons, including that perceived car-crime risk was highest and that perceived figures fell in the later year. However, the response is incomplete: it ends with “Finally, the given data was clearly said that” and provides no finished overall summary. Some details are also inaccurate or unclear. For example, actual car crime is about 4.5% in both years, not a fall from 4.5% to 4%; actual violent crime rises slightly from about 3% to 3.5%, rather than staying the same. The response contains 138 words, below the required 150. Add a clear overview and report the main changes accurately, while completing the final sentence.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an introduction and two paragraphs comparing car crime with burglary and violent crime. This gives the reader some sense of the categories being discussed. However, progression is weakened by the fragment “The information about the three categories of crime” and by the unfinished final sentence, which leaves the report without a conclusion or overview. Linking is also limited and sometimes awkward: “According to data in 2009” and “Finally” do not clearly guide the reader through the comparisons. Group the information consistently—for example, perceived figures first and actual figures second—and use clear transitions to show changes between the two years.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses enough basic topic vocabulary to identify “perceived,” “actual,” “burglary,” “car crime,” and “violent crime,” and it attempts to describe change with phrases such as “reduced” and “slightly.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, making some comparisons difficult to interpret. “The perceived for car crime” is not a natural way to describe the figure, while “was little high” does not clearly express a small increase. “The given data was clearly said” is also an unsuitable phrase for reporting a chart. Use precise reporting language such as “the perceived risk,” “the actual rate,” “rose slightly,” and “the chart shows.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparisons, but sentence structures are often incomplete or faulty, and errors sometimes obscure the intended meaning. For example, “The information about the three categories of crime” is a sentence fragment, while “the actual was slightly fell” combines incompatible verb forms. There are also problems with agreement and tense, as in “The burglary and violent crime was same” and “in 2010 was fell.” The final clause is unfinished, so it cannot communicate a complete idea. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use consistent past-tense forms such as “fell” or “was lower.” Check agreement and articles when describing categories.

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