Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This graph illustrate the perceived are formed and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime and other two types of crime - burglary and violent crime.

Overall, the car crime of perceived 2009 to 2010 is the highest crime of these years. Its about 21% all around of these two years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response makes a relevant attempt to identify a main feature, noting that perceived car crime in 2009/10 is highest at about 21%. However, it does not provide a meaningful overview of the chart as a whole or compare perceived and actual likelihoods across the three crime types and both years. The statement that this figure applies “all around of these two years” is inaccurate: perceived car crime falls to about 17% in 2010/11. The response also omits the other key pattern, that actual likelihoods are much lower than perceived figures. At 43 words, it is 107 words below the required minimum, with nine copied prompt words excluded. Develop an overview and report several accurate comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt at organisation: the response begins with an introductory sentence and then uses “Overall” to signal a summary. This gives the reader a minimal sense of structure. However, the first sentence is difficult to follow, and the second does not clearly connect its claim about 2009/10 to the phrase “all around of these two years.” With only two short sentences, there is no progression through the chart’s categories or comparisons, and no supporting details to make the overview coherent. Use a clear introduction, a concise overview, and a paragraph grouping the main comparisons; connect ideas with precise references to the years and crime types.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “perceived,” “actual likelihood,” “victim of crime,” and the crime labels “burglary” and “violent crime.” This shows an attempt to describe the chart rather than relying entirely on general language. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or unclear: “the perceived are formed” does not express a clear meaning, and “the car crime of perceived” is not a natural way to describe a chart category. “All around” is also unsuitable for reporting a percentage that changes between years. Use standard chart language such as “the perceived likelihood of car crime,” “the figure stood at,” and “compared with.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts two complete sentences and uses “Overall” to introduce a summary, but grammatical control is inconsistent. In “This graph illustrate,” the singular subject requires “illustrates.” The opening sentence also lacks a clear grammatical structure, making the relationship between perceived likelihood and the crime types hard to understand. In the second sentence, “Its about 21% all around of these two years” has unclear sentence construction and does not accurately express a comparison over time. The range is very limited, with no developed complex structures. Practise accurate simple reporting patterns first, such as “The graph illustrates…” and “The perceived figure for car crime was about 21% in 2009/10, falling to 17% in 2010/11.”

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