Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The alongside graphs makes the comparison of two different biennia, that is 2009/2010 and 2010/2011, in order to depict a specific trend regarding the crimes' victims rate. To be precise it enlightens the gap between the perceived and the actual statistics of being a victim of crime, categorizing them by crime type. It's interisting how the perception column slightly drops in the second biennium, implying that the people started to feel safer in general. However this trend doesn't reflect the actual data, since the statistics clearly show how the crimes rate have more likely remained unchaged. On the other hand, under some circumstances, the victim of crimes actually show a fairly increase, especially regarding the burglary crimes. In conclusion, I believe that the graph marks how the persception of people can feel significantly altered compared to the truth of the matter. It clarifies the gap between human judgment and reality.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s central contrast between perceived and actual crime risk and note that perceived figures fall in the later period while actual rates change little. However, the response does not report any figures or clearly compare the three crime types, so the main data patterns are only partially covered. The claim that burglary shows a notable increase is not well supported: actual burglary rises only slightly, from about 2% to 2.5%, while car crime remains around 4.5% and violent crime rises from about 3% to 3.5%. The overview is relevant, but the discussion remains general and the conclusion repeats the perception-versus-reality point rather than adding a precise summary. Include key values and comparisons to develop the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable progression: it introduces the comparison, comments on perceived risk, contrasts this with actual figures, and ends with a conclusion. Linking phrases such as “However,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help signal these moves. Nevertheless, the ideas are compressed into one paragraph, and the progression is not consistently clear because broad claims are not followed by specific evidence. For example, the statement that crime rates “have more likely remained unchanged” is followed by an unclear qualification about an increase in burglary. The final two sentences also repeat the same general point. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and key comparisons, and connect each claim directly to the relevant crime types and periods.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of formal and topic-related vocabulary, including “perceived,” “actual statistics,” “depict,” and “gap,” which helps communicate the chart’s subject. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “two different biennia,” “the perception column,” and “the victim of crimes actually show a fairly increase.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “interisting,” “unchaged,” and “persception.” These issues sometimes make the intended meaning less clear, particularly in the sentence about actual crime rates. Prefer precise chart language and familiar collocations, such as “the two periods,” “perceived risk,” and “a slight increase.” Check spelling carefully and avoid using elaborate wording when a simpler expression is more accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple and complex sentence forms, including a subordinate clause beginning “since” and a contrast introduced by “However.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but errors in sentence construction and agreement are evident. For example, “The alongside graphs makes” has an incorrect subject–verb relationship and article use, while “the crimes rate have” does not agree in number. In “the victim of crimes actually show a fairly increase,” the subject and verb do not match, and the sentence structure is faulty. The opening sentence is also awkwardly constructed, making the comparison difficult to follow. Aim for clearer, shorter sentences and check subject–verb agreement, singular and plural forms, and article use. More accurate control of these patterns would make your comparisons easier to understand.

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