Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph illutrates the percentages of possible danger and actual likelihood of being a vctim of crime between 2009 to 2011. Overall, majority of crime, is car acceident. followed by second majority violent crime.

In year 2009 to 2010, it was preceived that, there been around 15% of buglaryand violent crime , while turning out to only around 2% of burglary, on the other hand violent crime being nearly 3%. Another prediction was made regarding car crime, in year 2009 to 2010, by 21%, turning out to be nearly 4% than what was predicted.

In 2011, it was preceived that car crime, by around 18%, while actual resualt turned out to be same as year 2009 to 2010 by 4%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the broad topic and make some relevant comparisons, including the high perceived figure for car crime in 2009/10 and the much lower actual figure. However, the overview is inaccurate: “majority of crime” being car crime is not a supported summary, and violent crime is not consistently the second-highest category. Several key details are omitted, especially the 2010/11 figures for burglary and violent crime, and the claim that car crime was perceived at 18% is only one part of the comparison. The response also falls 30 words short of the required minimum. To improve, give a clear overview of the large gap between perceived and actual risk, then compare all three crime types across both years using accurate figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence: an opening statement, a paragraph about 2009/10, and a final comment on 2010/11. This gives the reader some sense of time order, and phrases such as “while” and “on the other hand” attempt to connect comparisons. However, the progression is incomplete because the final paragraph covers only car crime, leaving the other categories without a clear place in the account. Some links are also awkward or unclear, such as “turning out to only around 2% of burglary” and “by 21%, turning out to be nearly 4% than what was predicted.” Use separate, balanced paragraphs for the overview and the data, and make each comparison explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “percentages,” “actual,” “predicted,” and “violent crime,” so the reader can recognise the subject. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make the report less clear: “illutrates,” “vctim,” “preceived,” “buglary,” and “resualt.” The phrase “majority of crime” is also an imprecise way to describe the category with the highest percentage, while “car acceident” does not match the chart’s label, car crime. Aim for accurate chart language such as “the perceived risk,” “the actual rate,” and “the highest figure.” Check spelling carefully and avoid using “prediction” when describing survey perceptions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to compare figures using clauses with “while” and “on the other hand,” but sentence control is inconsistent, and several sentences are incomplete or difficult to interpret. For example, “Overall, majority of crime, is car acceident” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “In 2011, it was preceived that car crime, by around 18%” has no complete main clause. There are also problems with articles and verb forms, as in “there been around 15%” and “turning out to be nearly 4% than what was predicted.” Use complete subject–verb sentences, for example, “Car crime was perceived to affect about 21% of people, but the actual figure was approximately 4.5%.” Punctuate sentence boundaries consistently.

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