Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This graph describe the perceiving crime of actual likelihood of being a victim of Burglary, Car crime and, Violent crime in 2009 to 2011.

Overall the bar graph show the highest amount of Car crime in percentage perceived in 2009/10 and 2011/12. Actual proportion of Car crime are same in given period.

Burglary perceived percentage in 2009/10 is above 15% and in 2019/11 is almost 13%. Actual % in 2009 to 2011 is less than 4%. Car crime perceived % in 2009 to 2011 is nearly 21 and 14 approximately . And the actual % in given period is less then 5.

Perceived record of Violent crime is same as Burglary in 2009 to 2011. However, actual percentage in 2009/10 is nearly 3% and in 2010/11 is nearly 4%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the three crime types and make a relevant overall comparison: perceived risk is highest for car crime, while actual figures are much lower. However, the overview contains an incorrect year (“2011/12”), and the later car-crime estimate of “14 approximately” does not match the chart’s 2010/11 perceived figure of about 17%. Some details are also too vague: “less than 4%” does not accurately cover all burglary actual figures, and the violent-crime comparison is incomplete. The response is 129 words, below the required 150, so it has limited development. Add a clear overview and accurately compare the main changes across both years.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details about burglary, car crime and violent crime. This gives the reader some organisation, and linking words such as “Overall” and “However” help signal relationships. However, progression is weakened by the compressed, list-like presentation of figures and by unclear time references, including “2009 to 2011” and “2019/11.” The paragraphing also does not clearly separate the overview from the detailed comparisons. Group the information more deliberately—for example, compare perceived and actual figures across crime types—and use consistent year labels so the reader can follow the comparisons without having to infer them.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “percentage,” “actual,” “perceived” and “proportion,” so the topic is generally identifiable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “the perceiving crime of actual likelihood,” “highest amount … perceived,” and “Perceived record.” These expressions make some comparisons difficult to interpret. Repeated use of “%” and “nearly” also limits precision and variety. Use standard chart language such as “the perceived likelihood,” “the proportion who actually experienced crime,” and “stood at” or “fell to.” Check word forms and spelling, including “less than,” to make the report clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a few different sentence patterns, including a contrast introduced by “However,” and most of the basic meaning can be understood. Nevertheless, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships unclear. For example, “This graph describe” has subject–verb disagreement, while “the bar graph show” repeats this problem. The opening phrase “the perceiving crime of actual likelihood” is also structurally unclear, and “Actual proportion of Car crime are same” has problems with articles and agreement. Tense and time expressions are not controlled consistently. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine comparisons with clauses such as “Although perceived risk fell, actual rates remained low.” Review agreement, articles and punctuation.

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