Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.5)

As the chart shows, we think there is a greater possibility of being victim of a crime than the actual percetange suggests. The difference between both of the rates makes me think that we as a society have grown into a cautious life style.

The first thing that came into my attention is the fact that we fear a car crime even more than a violent crime or even a burglary. Perhaps, people consider their physical property more likely to be attacked. That does no mean that we are no concious about our wellbeing, but it is significative the comparision between the amount of population who fear a car crime and the ones who fear a direct aggression to their self.

Something that is also worth of pointitng out is that, with the pass of time, percentage of the crimes percieved is decreasing. We can see in the graph an important a lower perception of the danger we face, but in reality, the amount of actual committed crimes is almost the same.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify two relevant overall features: perceived risk is higher than actual victimisation, and perceived danger falls over time while actual rates change little. You also correctly note that car crime is feared more than violent crime or burglary. However, the response does not report any figures, and the comparison is not consistently precise: the chart shows perceived burglary and violent-crime risk at similar levels, while actual car crime is highest in both years. The claim that perception decreases is broadly right, but the size and category differences are left unclear. Some discussion shifts into speculation about society becoming cautious and people valuing property, rather than summarising the data. Include a concise overview and support it with selected figures for each crime type and year.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear paragraph structure, moving from a general observation to comparisons and then to change over time. Phrases such as “The first thing” and “Something that is also worth pointing out” help signal the sequence. The overall progression is understandable, though the first paragraph introduces a personal interpretation (“makes me think”) rather than establishing a neutral overview, and the final paragraph does not fully connect its trend statement to specific categories. Some references, including “both of the rates” and “the ones,” are not fully clear to the reader. Organise the report around an overview followed by grouped comparisons, and use explicit references such as “perceived rates” and “actual rates” to make the links more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of topic-related language, including “possibility,” “perception,” “actual committed crimes,” and “direct aggression.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision: “a cautious life style,” “worth of pointitng out,” and “the amount of population” do not express the intended ideas naturally. There are also spelling errors such as “percetange,” “concious,” “significative,” and “comparision.” In an IELTS chart report, prefer concise, conventional terms such as “perceived risk,” “actual crime rates,” and “the proportion of people.” Proofreading spelling and choosing standard collocations would make your meaning clearer and more appropriately formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, for example the contrast in “That does no mean that we are no concious about our wellbeing, but…” and the time clause beginning “with the pass of time.” The main ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors affect accuracy. In “there is a greater possibility … than the actual percentage suggests,” the comparison is not formed clearly; “the percentage of people who perceive risk is higher than the actual rate” would be more controlled. The sentence beginning “we can see … an important a lower perception” also has a faulty structure, and “the amount of actual committed crimes is” uses an awkward noun construction and agreement pattern. Build comparisons with parallel forms and check articles, agreement, and sentence structure.

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