Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The following bar graph illustrates the information about the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime from 2009 to 2011 year.

Overall,the percentage of perceived danger 2009/10 in car crime was maximum over the period while ratio of actual 2009/10 in burglary was minimum.The ratio of car crime in every condition was maximum.

It clearly seen that

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify the chart’s subject and make two relevant comparisons: perceived car-crime risk in 2009/10 is the highest figure, while actual burglary risk is the lowest. However, the response is far too brief to summarise the chart: it contains 49 words, below the required 150, and ends with the incomplete phrase “It clearly seen that”. There is no account of the main changes between the two years, such as perceived risk falling for all three crime types while actual rates rise slightly or remain stable. The claim that car crime is highest “in every condition” is also inaccurate: actual burglary, not car crime, is the lowest, and the statement does not distinguish perceived from actual figures. Include a clear overview and selected supporting data for each series.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, beginning with an introduction and then an overview signalled by “Overall”. The two comparisons in that overview are relevant, so the reader can identify some intended points. However, the response has no developed progression: it stops after “It clearly seen that”, leaving the final idea unfinished and providing no detail paragraph. The relationship between the comparisons is also unclear in “while ratio of actual 2009/10 in burglary was minimum”, and “every condition” does not specify which years or measures are being compared. To improve, use a complete overview followed by a paragraph comparing perceived figures and another comparing actual figures, with clear references to the years and crime types.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “perceived danger”, “actual likelihood”, “percentage” and the crime categories. These terms show an attempt to describe the chart rather than discuss crime generally. However, several expressions are imprecise or unnatural, such as “ratio of actual 2009/10”, “was maximum” and “in every condition”; they make the comparisons harder to interpret. “Information about” is also a vague description of what the graph presents. Use more precise chart language, for example “the perceived risk of car crime”, “the highest percentage” and “across both years and measures”. Check word forms and collocations so that the vocabulary communicates the intended comparison clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a complex comparison in the sentence beginning “Overall”, using “while” to connect two observations. The opening sentence also communicates the general topic despite some awkward construction. However, grammatical control is inconsistent: “Overall,the” needs a space after the comma, “the percentage … was maximum” lacks a natural grammatical construction, and “It clearly seen that” is missing the auxiliary verb “is”. The phrase “from 2009 to 2011 year” also has an incorrect singular form and awkward time expression. Most of the response consists of short, basic statements, and the final sentence is incomplete. Practise complete comparative sentences, accurate articles and verb forms, and punctuation; for example, “It is clear that perceived risk was highest for car crime in 2009/10.”

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