Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar presentation elucidates informtion about perceived danger and actual liklihood of being victim of crime. At a first glance, it can be promptly noticed that there was overall highest figure of percieved car crime in 2009 to 2010 except others with 22%.

From the given statistics, it is apparent that the perceived car crime is highest with 22% but the actual car crime were lowestwith the 4% in 2010and remained same in 2011.

On the other hand, the perceived voilent car crime and Burglary had similar figure with the 13% in 2010 to 2011.and after that it become

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies a relevant overall feature: perceived car-crime risk is higher than the other perceived categories, while actual figures are much lower. However, the account is very incomplete and includes inaccurate or unclear comparisons. The chart shows perceived car crime at about 21% in 2009/10 and 17% in 2010/11, not 22% in “2009 to 2010”; actual car crime is about 4.5% in both years, so calling it the “lowest” is misleading because burglary has the lowest actual rate. The statement about perceived violent crime and burglary being similar at 13% applies only approximately to 2010/11, and the sentence then breaks off. The response is also 51 words below the required minimum. Cover all three crime types and both years, and give a complete overview.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, moving from an opening observation to further comparisons, and phrases such as “From the given statistics” and “On the other hand” signal relationships between ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the same car-crime point is repeated, while the other categories receive little explanation. The final sentence ends abruptly at “and after that it become,” leaving the comparison unfinished. Some linking is also inaccurate: “On the other hand” does not clearly introduce a contrast with the preceding point. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and the main comparisons, then order the details by year or crime type and complete each sentence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response attempts some task-appropriate vocabulary, including “perceived,” “actual likelihood,” “statistics,” and “figure,” and the intended topic is generally recognisable. However, spelling errors such as “informtion,” “liklihood,” “percieved,” and “voilent” are noticeable, and some expressions are awkward or imprecise. For example, “bar presentation” is less natural than “bar chart,” while “perceived violent car crime” appears to confuse violent crime with car crime. “Highest figure” and “lowest” are also used without enough precision about which year or category is being compared. Build accuracy with standard chart language such as “percentage,” “rate,” “rose,” and “fell,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response includes some simple sentence structures and attempts longer comparisons, but control is uneven. The opening sentence is missing an article in “being victim of crime,” and “there was overall highest figure” has an incomplete or awkward grammatical structure. In “the actual car crime were lowest,” the subject and verb do not agree, and the comparison is not expressed clearly. The final clause, “and after that it become,” is incomplete and uses an incorrect verb form. Punctuation also causes problems, particularly the full stop placed after “2011” before the unfinished continuation. Practise complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, accurate articles and agreement, and consistent past-tense forms when describing the chart.

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