Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrates the perceived danger and actual likehood of being a victim of crime. Perceived and actual likehood of being a victim of crime.

Over all it is clear that , car crime is the highest percentage of victim .While, second rank accounted for violent crime and followed by burgalay .

Looking at the details, the first biggest crime car crime, perceived 2009/2010 22% to17% 2010/11 and actual 2009/10 similar to both years 4%. While, burglary and violent crime accounted for second place,it is simmilar to the both years perceived 2009/10 15% to 14% both crimes and actual 2009/10 2% to increase 3% and second crime equal to 4% only.

In summary, most of the car crime victim are highest in the graph. The second highest victim are burglary and violent crime.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s main broad pattern: car crime has the highest perceived and actual figures, while actual rates are much lower than perceived ones. However, the overview is incomplete and partly inaccurate: burglary and violent crime are not consistently ranked as you suggest, and the chart shows perceived burglary and violent crime at similar levels, with some differences between years. Several figures are also unclear or misreported, such as saying actual car crime is “similar to both years 4%” and describing the other actual figures as increasing to 3% or 4%. The response also contains only 134 words, below the required 150. To improve, give a precise overview and compare the four series across both years using clearly labelled figures, without repeating the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure, moving from an introduction to an overview and then to details, so the reader can recognise an attempt to organise the report. However, progression is limited: the final “In summary” repeats the earlier claim rather than adding a useful comparison, and the detail paragraph combines several crime types and years in a confusing sequence. Linking words such as “While” are used awkwardly, including at the start of incomplete or poorly connected statements. Group the information more clearly—for example, compare perceived figures first and actual figures second—and use straightforward links such as “By contrast” and “In both years” to show relationships accurately.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “perceived,” “actual,” and “accounted for,” which helps communicate the topic. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, making some comparisons difficult to understand. Phrases such as “highest percentage of victim,” “second rank,” and “first biggest crime” do not express the data precisely; “victim” is also used where a rate or likelihood is meant. There are noticeable spelling errors, including “likehood,” “burgalay,” and “simmilar.” Build a small set of accurate reporting expressions, such as “the highest perceived likelihood” and “the actual rate,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparisons, but the range is limited and longer sentences are often difficult to follow. For example, “While, burglary and violent crime accounted for second place,it is simmilar to the both years…” joins ideas without a clear grammatical structure. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as in “the second highest victim are,” while the opening repeats the title as a sentence fragment. Commas are frequently misplaced, including after “clear that” and before “While.” Use complete, shorter sentences to report each comparison, and check subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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