Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-07-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The graph above shows us the likelihood of being a victim in a crime. Being a victim in a crime, leave a traumatic memory in your mind. The graph above shows the the percentage of perceived and actual crimes in the year of 2009 to 2011 in burglary, car crime and violent crime. Starting off with burglary, more than 15% cases were perceived in [redacted phone] and less than 5% cases were determined as actual cases for the same years. But in [redacted phone] the perceived amounts of cases decreased in comparison to before but the actual cases increased. Now about the car crime, the perceived amount of cases in 2009/10 is the highest among all considering how it's above 20% but actual cases were less than 5% but higher than others. In the year 2010/11 perceived cases were between 20% to 15% and actual cases were less than 5%. In violent crime perceived cases are 15% and actual cases are less than actual cases from 2010/11. And the perceived cases from 2010/11 from violent case is less than 15% and actual cases is higher than the actual case from year 2009/10.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, including the three crime types and the two time periods. However, the analysis is somewhat descriptive and lacks a clear overview or summary of the main trends. The comparison between perceived and actual likelihood is attempted, but the phrasing is often repetitive and lacks precision (e.g., 'actual cases is higher than the actual case from year 2009/10'). To improve, you should group the data more effectively and provide a clear opening statement that highlights the most significant difference between perceived and actual crime rates across all categories.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is presented as a single paragraph, which makes it difficult to follow. IELTS Task 1 responses should be structured with a clear introduction, an overview, and distinct body paragraphs for different categories or trends. While there is some attempt to use transition words like 'Starting off with' and 'But', the flow is often mechanical. The lack of paragraphing and the repetitive structure of the sentences hinder the logical progression of ideas. Using a wider variety of cohesive devices and organizing the information into logical paragraphs would significantly improve the clarity of your report.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive, relying heavily on phrases like 'perceived cases' and 'actual cases'. There is little attempt to use synonyms or more sophisticated terminology related to data description (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'a significant disparity'). Some phrasing is awkward, such as 'the year of 2009 to 2011', which is not standard usage. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate a broader range of vocabulary to describe trends and comparisons, and ensure that your word choices are precise and appropriate for an academic report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'Being a victim in a crime, leave a traumatic memory', 'the the percentage', and 'in the year of 2009 to 2011'. Subject-verb agreement and preposition usage are inconsistent throughout the text. While the meaning is generally clear, these errors occur frequently and occasionally impede the flow of reading. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for small errors like repeated words or incorrect verb forms will help improve your score.
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